You are him
He is you
The boy with the scar on his head.
And the one who gave the curse
The one who must not be named.
You are him
When showering love on your friends all life
He is you
When you March ahead, with your pals paying the price.
You are him
The day you feel different and unique
He is you when you
Where you fall and rise
And accomplish what you call noble deeds.
You are him
If you lose but yet you win
He is you
If you brought fame to yourself
And glory to your kin.
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THIS IS TOTALLY AWESOME!! It's brilliant how you wrote the relation between Harry and Voldemort. You have gone very deep in the story and it's really great.
This is the best poetry on the Harry Potter theme.
I am a huge Potterhead and this is a thing meant for Potterheads to love. Just keep on the good work and thank you for this one.
Thank You Bhaavya Singh!
Finally found someone really liking the poem.
Hey!
This one is awesome!
Thanks A lot!!!
Only a true Potterhead could relate to it.
Yep.
Okay, correct me if i'm wrong, but this gave me HUGE Harry Potter vibes. Honestly this is awesome, this is the first piece of poetry that [i think] is about Harry Potter.
I think it's really cool that it kind of followed the plotline of the books. To me, it was based of the last book am I right? I think your language is on point and I don't see any grammar issues because, of coarse, punctuation in poetry has weird rules. XD
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I think you probably could have chosen a better word for "pals" just, you know, based on your style. But otherwise I don't think there was anything else.
Once again, I want to say that this is amazing. Not only because of everything I mentioned earlier, but also it's a really developed piece. You made me feel more of the story by so vaguely telling it in your own words.
But then again, this could be about anything else, so I'm sorry if I'm completely wrong in assuming this was HP. I'm just a huge potterhead!
Welp thanks for taking the time to read this!
I love this, I may not know who this about in your poem, but I love it nonetheless!:)
I don't really have that many suggestions, for you. Maybe just look over it to see if there's any punctuation errors n it, like adding commas and whatnot. I think you did wonderfully, so I can't wait to read more of your poems and the like! Keep up the fantastical work!:)
~ Lake:D
*chokes on cocoa because you don't know what Harry Potter is*
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Read the first line as thinking about Potter and the second keeping Voldemort in mind.
Then tell me if I understand Harry Potter or not.
I really enjoyed reading this poem for its mysterious tone, rhythm and content. I did try to perceive a difference between the shifts between he being him and in being him. But I failed to see any differences that might lend me a clue to a meaning. So the poem's charm lies in its paradoxically unsolvable essence as far as I am concerned.
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One suggestion is to space the copyright away from the poem since the way it is now it seems to be par of it. In fa, I actually attempted to read it that way.