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The Golden Strata: Chapter 1 /P

by Incandescence


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Tue Dec 20, 2005 5:26 am
Jessie Hartman says...



Amazing. Please keep going, you are so talented! It's incredibly well-written, and it grabbed my attention instantly!




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Fri Oct 14, 2005 5:04 am



why thank you brad




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Thu Sep 01, 2005 6:53 am
Elizabeth says...



I KNOW WHAAAA
it sounded so good from all the short ungood comments
ahhhhh *me and morgan plot against something*




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Wed Aug 31, 2005 2:39 pm
Chevy says...



Why can't I have Adobe? *sniff*




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Mon May 23, 2005 4:28 am
Incandescence says...



Hahaha. No, it's okay. I already noticed them, but the thing about Marketplace -> Mar etplace is sarcasm about the faded out cloth (i.e. some letters don't show up.).




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Mon May 23, 2005 4:02 am
ohhewwo says...



Aniar, you do realize that on the home page it said in big letters "DO NOT POINT OUT GRAMMATICAL ERRORS?"

Just checking.




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Mon May 23, 2005 1:41 am
Snoink says...



There was an error when I tried to get the story.




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Mon May 23, 2005 1:38 am
Nai wrote a review...



Wow, Brad this is really good. Seriousy I really liked this.

I could find pretty much no mistakes except for a few typos I thought you would appreciate if I pointed them out:

In page 8 of 11, second paragraph;
You have "SKY5400I" and "SKY5400i"... are they the same?

In page 9 of 11, in the second paragraph;
First sentence: the 'k' is missing between 'Mar' and 'etplace'
Same sentence: "Kingdo of Gab iel" to "Kingdom of Gabriel" (i think your using Gabriel)

Page 10 out of 11, first paragraph;
First sentence: "Mar etplace" to "Marketplace"

Other than those small things, again, this was really good.


Oh I have a question, did you really copyright this?
If so, where did you go and how much did it cost?




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Mon May 23, 2005 12:51 am
emotion_less says...



That was interesting. The scene with the house was described very well. I hope you let us read more of it.




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Mon May 23, 2005 12:01 am
ohhewwo wrote a review...



This ... was really good.

I could feel the emptiness of this planet.

The intro was beautiful. It described this unfamiliar universe in such a way that it made me feel just as hopeless as it.

I am looking strongly forward to the next entry of this. Awesome.





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