Beautiful. My eyes were literally glued to the screen. See, that's good writing. Not stories written by poor little fourteen year olds who think they're wonderful, about a girl being allowed onto some random ship and falling in love with the cabin boy, or the orphan brought up in the theatre making friends with the little African boy with an Italian name. Not poems about cutting yourself and watching the blood.
Something that sounds like real writing.
Although, I had a problem with one part:
[quote="Incandescence"]
All I saw was Vince lying in the snow, with blood spurting out of his head.quote]
Spurting, it just doesnt sound right. Not powerful enough I guess. Really, really weak.
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