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Thu Jul 03, 2008 3:08 am
sigorros says...



Quite a nice story. I felt the drunkenness might have been a little much after one beer, but that's just my tolerance. Overall a great short story.




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Sun Jun 12, 2005 12:58 am
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It was very nice, very simple. I liked how hopelessly real it was. I really enjoy your writing, I don't know if I've told you that yet. I enjoy simplicity and good syntax more than endless description.

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Tue Jun 07, 2005 2:21 pm
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The one thing I appreciate about your stories is that you when it comes to the dialogue its like...you can take it anywhere. And there's no pause which gives the reader the freedom to just keep reading and not stopping.
It's also interesting that you can remember something like that and then write about it with such detail...I've been keeping a diary since 1998 and I have almost everyday of my life from then to now recorded and still, I could never pull from it and compose a story.




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Mon Jun 06, 2005 2:50 pm
emotion_less says...



That made me really sad, for some reason... Very nicely written.




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Mon Jun 06, 2005 1:14 pm
Shadow Knight says...



What Crysi said.
Also what Matt said XD




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Mon Jun 06, 2005 10:28 am
Matt Bellamy says...



As usual, I want to say something vaguely constructive, but can't. Loved it, as always.




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Sun Jun 05, 2005 2:23 pm
Lollipop says...



I agree. You made the story seem so real. It's amazing!




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Sun Jun 05, 2005 2:14 pm
Firestarter says...



The way it was written made me believe it was real. There's a couple of typos that I can't be bothered finding and you probably don't care about anyway.




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Sun Jun 05, 2005 6:24 am
Crysi says...



Wow. So, a true story? You're a brave man for posting that. Very nice. I applaud you.





Poetry is a phantom script telling how rainbows are made and why they go away.
— Carl Sandburg