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Quite a nice story. I felt the drunkenness might have been a little much after one beer, but that's just my tolerance. Overall a great short story.
It was very nice, very simple. I liked how hopelessly real it was. I really enjoy your writing, I don't know if I've told you that yet. I enjoy simplicity and good syntax more than endless description.
I have family in Lufkin.
-Sarah
The one thing I appreciate about your stories is that you when it comes to the dialogue its like...you can take it anywhere. And there's no pause which gives the reader the freedom to just keep reading and not stopping.
It's also interesting that you can remember something like that and then write about it with such detail...I've been keeping a diary since 1998 and I have almost everyday of my life from then to now recorded and still, I could never pull from it and compose a story.
That made me really sad, for some reason... Very nicely written.
What Crysi said.
Also what Matt said XD
As usual, I want to say something vaguely constructive, but can't. Loved it, as always.
I agree. You made the story seem so real. It's amazing!
The way it was written made me believe it was real. There's a couple of typos that I can't be bothered finding and you probably don't care about anyway.
Wow. So, a true story? You're a brave man for posting that. Very nice. I applaud you.