We don't talk anymore
We make love and then we're out that door
We're falling apart- but the world can't see
Because we're doing it secretly
You were inside my head
But now you're gone
Now you're just in my bed
It's the same old song
I know when I'm wrong
And I made the mistake of trustin' you
Made the mistake of gettin' close to you
You took my heart in your hands
At first coddled and protected it as if you understand
You said,"I love you," and we're never going to end
It was all a lie
The love we had
Till the day we die
I'm losin' my mind
Always thinkin' of we used to have
Thinkin' in the past instead of what we are right now
You're here but I don't see you
You're speaking but I don't hear you
Always said you'd be mine
But your his too
Always said,"Love's kind,"
But you're over there bein' his boo
What's goin' on?
We were talkin' just earlier today
You said you loved me and you'd keep me in every way
Now you're gone and I don't know where you're at
Who are you havin' fun with?
Don't tell me- I don't want to know
Everytime I ask I just feel sick
What do you want me to say?
I understand you wantin' to play around?
Forget it- if you're not down for one guy then you're not down for two
I don't care who it is- it's still a mistake and we're through
I was never in a position to place blame
But what we're goin' through ain't a game
Started out tame and went wild
People always saying,"You don't know what love is- you're just a child."
I'm startin' think they're right
You weren't ready, and neither was I
Too young, too dumb to understand what we had was fragile
The cage of love rattles but it ain't breakin' without a hassle
It ain't goin' no where unless you want to leave it behind
I should've realized I should've manned up
And that's hard to say as a man
Always thought if you had love you can do anything
Always thought if you had love everything's worth it
It doesn't matter anymore
What we think, what we know
Everything we had turned cold and iced over in the snow
No matter how many lyrics I blow or if I make it to the show
We're over.
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And that day, there was seen neither hide nor hair of a chorus. Wwwwwwhy?
There are legitimately some parts of this that sound, in my head, like a country song, and then roughly midways through, you start shortening words and using 'boo' and speaking like a thug and. Ugh, rap. Raaaaaap. I'll get over it.
So, a breakdown for the folks at home who haven't known the Casanova saga:
A young man, in love, is romantically entangled with a woman who is emotionally distant and plays games with him, and he says he is having none of that, but in a turn of events, he is, indeed, having some of that.
That's legitimately even explained in the lyrics. I have to caution you against the use of 'boo'. I do. I really do. There's just no returning from that circle of hell once you get there, and I don't have a rope long enough, and my rope budget is limited.
Joking aside, as a lyrical piece your flow is pretty solid because you have the beat in your head. You don't really miss much, though when you begin shortening words and throwing in TERMS LIKE BOO, the reader (on paper) is thrown. It's why I believe lyrics should be accompanied by a reading. Same with spoken word. I understand this would take up an extra three minutes of your day, so ignore this note--just a note that I demand with no utter bargain whatsoever amen.
Hi there!
So first of all I wanted to say I think this is a good progression in terms of narrative.
- the boyfriend and girlfriend are still together but there's something missing
- the something missing is love, because the girlfriend is cheating with someone else
- the boyfriend begins to realize that it's pointless to stay together if the girlfriend can't be loyal
- the boyfriend breaks up with the girlfriend
I think it leaves off in a good place because the boyfriend gets out of a relationship that's no good anymore, and he can start moving on now.
If this is meant as a song - as I assume from the fact that it's listed under "lyrics" - I'm wondering where the chorus would be. Right now there doesn't appear to be one. Which I guess there doesn't NEED to be, but it's just something I noticed.
Finally, this line.
The word "boo" just seemed out of place because it was at odds with the rest of the language of the song. I understand you probably just wanted to rhyme with "too" of a previous line, but it hit me oddly.
No chorus, because it was freestyle to someome. and boo was for rhyme purposes.