Young Writers Society

Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a few things to say about your poem, and to help get it out the green room.

I'm glad to say I didn't see anything wrong with the poem. I thought it was written really well, so well the emotion in your writing you wanted to get across did, and it was very powerful. What I'm trying to say was this poem was deep very deep, and I really liked it. But that's not the only thing I liked. I though the riming was really well done, and made it even better.
I thought the length was a really good choice too, I didn't feel like you were trying to stretch out the poem. Your word choice was also really good along with your punctuation.

Everything was just spot on, and I hope I will get to see more works like this from you soon. Because I just loved reading this and getting a chance to review it too. Never stop writing and have a great day or night.

Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.

Hi @4revgreen , Rav3nB1ack here!

Literally just saw Macbeth and immediately clicked it because I remembered that I loved to study that book when I was in school! It's such a good play! However, I don't remember much of it - whether that will be a bad thing or not I will see as I read this

I'll review this as I go along

I love how you use rhyming couplets throughout the poem, rarely breaking that pattern. It gives it a consistent rhythm and allows the poem to flow smoothly. Also since there's that consistence to the pattern, as the reader I expect it to continue that way.

In regards to the pattern, did you perhaps think of breaking it to disrupt the flow and highlight the importance of a specific stanza or line? I think that would be an interesting idea to work with.

I don't know if you did the number of stanzas on purpose or this was just a coincidence, but I love that there's 4 because the number four is known to symbolise completion and in this poem it's as if from the beginning to the end, the story becomes full circle. I like that!

Overall, this was an interesting read and a fun re-visit to a play I had to study back when I was in school xD