For once in my life

Nice!

I like the contrast you presented between school life and college life. I especially dote the last few lines:

"but those who are in charge

are always saying i'm here to

help you

not i'm here to tell you what

to do."

Quite an interesting and relatable read, I like it!

Keep up the good work!
Cheers..

Hey! Interesting work here. I see you've portrayed a contrast between high school/elementary school and college. Your words give the reader something to ponder. In a way, college is a place of freedom, sort of like a fresh start, a blank sheet of paper. I think that this concept is debatable, because no matter where a person goes, there are always people forming opinions about them, as well as individuals who will exert an attitude of superiority. But you've shown your opinion, and that makes it unique.

I'm going to give a little constructive criticism. You have used little to no capitalization and punctuation. Putting forth the effort to include these important elements will make your work more readable and, I feel, more professional appearing. It also clearly defines the message you're attempting to convey.

That's all for now! Keep up the good work!

Hey there - here to review!
My first suggestion is to throw a proper title on this, a title sets the tone for the entire piece and try as I might not to judge a book by its cover, when the title is nonexistent or deragatory of the work I tend not to think of the poem as a final draft, which doesn't let me take the poem as seriously. Even using the first line "for once in my life" is better than no title.

That said, this poem isn't quite written in the classic "stream of conciousness" way that usually has a bit more randomness and emotionally charged/driven - this is emotional but is more description/conflict & solution driven.

Line breaks felt a bit random, its perfectly alright to break up a line mid phrase for effecr but make sure whatever word you're ending on is the most powerful hitting one of the options [ie. not "the", or "have") - there's no plot connected purpose for stilted flow in this piece, so I would try to move the line breaks to end of phrases rather than midphrase, or at least end on more significant words.

Lastly, I think the poems strength is its clarity - its perfectly clear to see what this poem is about and I'm sure many can connect to this description of transition. You could use a bit more playfullness and creativity in the writing like by elevating word choice & adding in some metaphor for the new found freedom. This would make the poem have more impact.

Best,

alliyah