Young Writers Society

I liked this poem, so I shall review it...

It was very well written, but it has some mistakes (we all make them though). In the fourth line you put "don't never". That is a double negative, so you may want to fix that. The second to last line, "Be AS mad as you want to" would make more sense. There was a lack in punctuation, but I wouldn't call that a mistake. Personally I like that lack. It makes this poem feel like one thought.

Now... The stuff I like!

You had power in this poem, and it was noticed. I really like how you called the bully your friend. You admitting that they might be right made you seem small for giving in, but it made you the powerful character when you said you don't care. Hopefully you do get to the top. I can't wait to see you get there

This poem breaks my heart because it reminds me of my high school years. Oh, how I hated them sometimes because there are people who say that I'm the worst human being because I'm not what they are. I'm glad I'm not one of those people because at least I'm nice, not sexually attractive, and drinking. This poem is an inspiration, I can tell you that.

One line is confusing to me though. "You told me that I don't never have friends." That could mean two things. One, it means that someone told you that you always have friends. Two, it means that the never is a misspelling. Any other way, I would like to know if that's not a misspelling or anything like that. Otherwise, this poem is a very good poem indeed.

RoyalHighness has arrived to review!
You tell 'em, girl!
I was bullied for four years; I'm applauding you on this.
However, there were a few nitpick-y things we have to get through before I can compliment your bravery.

Nitpick #1

Spoiler! :

It takes a lot of guts to decide you won't let bullying drag you down. It's certainly not the easy decision; the easy decision is to let it consume you until you become a bully yourself and are completely dependent upon other people's misery to bring you happiness.
So good job on... uh... not doing that
So I loved the way you laid out everything the bully had said in the beginning, and then chip away at it until by the end, there's nothing left but your awesomeness.
For next time, I'd focus on your diction; it's a little weak in this poem, and I think if you'd chosen stronger words, you could have painted a clearer or brighter picture of your feelings.
But for now, it was pretty good! I like the story you set up and I like the way you showed your personality while telling a story even though you didn't explicitly /say/ anything about yourself... I'm rambling, but the point is, you did really well.