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Name: Stuart James Pritchard
Age: 39
Height: 6'7
Weight: 130
Birthplace: Bristol, New England
Birth date: November 24, 1974
Race: White
Hair: Strawberry Blonde
Eyes: Light Blue
Skin Tone: Paler than people in Los Angeles
Religion: None
Sidling: He have a sister named London(She will appear in the part when he call her in jail).
Parents' names: Robert Lee Pritchard and Erica Pritchard(They don't appear on the story or I might)
Personalities: Mean, kind(Sometimes), awkward, and self-centered
Glasses or contacts: Black Glasses
Child/Children: Stephanie Pritchard
Friends: Jessica, Rory, Wade, and Kives
Enemies: Stephanie(sometimes), the popular kids who mess with his daughter, and Stephanie's ex-boyfriends
Spouse/Girlfriend: Well, I can't tell you who it is. I need to make Stephanie's mother a secret to you guys.
Social Class: He is very uncivil to people including his daughter; however, he is polite to Jessica and Stephanie.
Occupation: Web designer
Favorite Music: Pop music, soft rock, and old school
Favorite food: Well, I guess everything because I think of anything else.
Favorite drink: Wine
Favorite TV show: Madmen
Hobbies: Going to clubs to get women
Good characteristic: Being supportive and have sense of humor
Bad Characteristic: Always selfish and disrespectful
Bad memory: Getting rejected by beautiful women
Good memory: Met his woman of his dreams, Stephanie's real mom.
Lives: Large suburban area
City or Town: Los Angeles
Speech Patterns: He has a deep, Bristol accent, which it made one of Stephanie's exes think he is a farmer.
Gesture: Similar like his daughter. He talk with his hands
Weakness: When he saw Jessica or Stephanie upset.
Special Abilities: He make web sites. Is that special ability?
Family Finances: Middle Class
Pets: None
Home Life during Childhood: He had a great life when he was young.(Now he is making his daughter's life miserable!)
What is his room looks like: A India-style room. It is very nice and clean
Important Event/Experience: Going on a date with a model
Bad habit: Always pulling himself
Good habit: Well, I don't know any good habits for them. I guess he is trying to protect someone.
Proud of: Himself getting laid
Embarrassed by: Himself, his daughter, and his friends
Driving style: A car
Temperament: He is very calm, but he is furious when things didn't turned out that he planned
Fears: That the models or any beautiful woman will leave him
Secret: He never wanted to have a baby and he had his condom broken with Stephanie's mom.
Regrets: Like I said on Stephanie's
Feel Vulnerable when: Is alone
Conflicts: Dealing with his daughter and trying to have a wife.
Short term for Hope and Goals: Like I said on Stephanie's
Sexuality: Straight
Introvert or Extrovert: Extrovert
Optimist or Pessimist: Optimist
Favorite words: "Hello, Ladies!"
Clothing: Causal
Greatest Want: to be loved
Greatest Need: same like Greatest Want
Biggest Mistake: Making his daughter useless
Intelligence Level: C-
Love Life: Worse than he'd expected
Relationship: Stephanie' mom(break-up)
Sexual Turn Ons: When women who are beautiful, airhead, and hyper
Sexual Turn Offs: When women who used men for money and sex.
Mission: Get a wife
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Canary word: Present
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The image is not quite how I pictured him from the bio.
Well done for finding one that fits though, I can see why you picked it now. I spent a while trying to find the right images for my characters.
The image is not quite how I pictured him from the bio.
Well done for finding one that fits though, I can see why you picked it now. I spent a while trying to find the right images for my characters.
Hey, Elinor here for my first review in ages.
So what have we here... Another character profile. Very good. I understand you are trying to have us know the character before the story even begins. I must say that I find that rather... Well, somewhat dubious. You see, when we read a story, we want to get to know the character. It's like going down a well: we probe gently at first, get the basics, and then we go deeper, and we actually get to know, and, sometimes, even love a character. But here you just toss the facts at us. We already know what should be at least 40% of the story: the characters. Thus we think, 'why should we care'. Reading stories isn't just the plot, but also the stuff that holds the story together.
So now we are faced with more details than we (or at least, I) care to know. All those little things that ought to be told to us through the actual story. For example, his favourite drink. Maybe you should have said, in the story:
Wearily he collapsed onto the sofa, running his fingers through his tousled strawberry-blond hair. He grabbed the remote and switched on the television. He grinned, despite the fatigue. Mad Men! He reached for the bottle of wine. He took a swig and sighed, wiping his mouth with the back of his hand.
See? That there is not one, not two, but three facts all merged into the story. A lot more practical, don't you think?
Anyway, now for some a little nit-picking...
"Race: White"
That is rather vague. White can be Latino, Scandinavian, Gallic... The list goes on.
"Social Class: he is very uncivil to people including his daughter; however he is polite to Jessica and Stephanie"
How can you be uncivil, yet polite to someone? That doesn't make sense. Also, how is this social Class? That can be low, middle, or upper. Perhaps you meant 'manners with other people'.
Being selfish ( bad characteristics) and supportive ( good characteristics) go together like chalk and cheese. Which is to say not at all. They differ entirely.
"Driving Style: A car."
That is somewhat irrelevant. Also, don't you mean: Mean of Transport?
Anyway, that's enough for now. Please bear in mind that I am merely trying to be supportive. You are in that writer's period when you write and write and any criticism be damned. Yet you have to face that sometime, especially if you are a writer. I hope you continue writing.
All the best.
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Interestingly put, but I think it would be more engaging for the reader if you maybe used these “----:-----“ in between text that are 1st person narrated.
Maybe start each chapter with some or something. It is although an interesting concept of trying to potray all your thoughts about the character. I just feel it’d be more interesting if we had text in between. But yes, occasional funny or bizarre answers will keep your readers interested if you intend to not shange the pattern.
Hope this helps.
Personally, this is my opinion, and you don't have to listen. If you think that you will be offended, you don't even have to read. This is my opinion. It is clearly one that we do not share, so do not be angry at me for expressing it. The only thing that i am trying to do is maybe show you some views on this popular opinion that you may not have caught before.
As a writer, it is your job to show the readers who your character is through the story. Use their actions, thoughts and interactions to show who they are. Let them have the pleasure of investigating and figuring out who this character is. Let them have a relationship with the character of some kind. Let them experience things with the character and get to know them through that.
Now, i still must say that this goes beyond the average character bio. It is a lot more detailed, and i think that that is a very good thing. Please don't be upset!
Well, I am writing with him and his daughter, which it called Life of Stephanie Pritchard. I need to do a character bio for me to remember about this character. I am just a wannabe writer, not a great writer as you. Please excuse me as I make a list for my characters
I honestly did not appreciate your comment. I told you that if you would get offended, you do not have to read it. Also, i didn't even criticize your work. You could've let me know if you like doing it or whatever. That is my opinion, so you really didn't have to say that.
I am not upset. I am saying that I used these character bios to help me remember these character. I know I should a story like I am doing right now. So I am not offended
Okay. Did you just leave a snarky comment for pleasure?
No, dude. I am telling you why I doing it.
Am doing it. Present tense verbs ending in ing need a linking verb preceding them. Also, i was never saying that i was a great writer, so saying that i think that is a bit offensive. You shouldn't just make assumptions like that. So, please don't "put words in my mouth" again.
I am not being mean. I had seen your work and it is better then mine. I really think you are a great writer. I am not trying to be rude. I am saying that you are a great writer.
Oh...
I really misunderstood your comment, as you can probably see. I'm really sorry. This is the internet, therefore, i cannot hear your tone of voice.
He sound like a really fun and cool character! I really want to read a story with him. I hope you write one soon. It sounds like here will definitely be an interesting plotline with this Stuart Pritchard. I hope the story comes out soon because I can't WAIT!
Did you saw Hello Ladies?
Ignore that one