Introduce to Stephanie

Hello! Something like this isn't easy to review... but I'll give it a shot!

Well, you have a good character going on here and I don't have any criticisms about the character, really. However, character sheets like this are essentially supposed to be a reference when you're writing; you weren't very descriptive, so it can't help you much.

Nationality: Great British and U.S.A

Race: British

I don't think "Great British" is the correct term, and if she was born and lives in California how is she British? Also, race is different than nationality; if her race is the same as the girl in the picture, she's white.

Hair color: Blonde

Hair style: Straight

Glasses or Contract: Glasses, but sometimes contract

Eye Color: Blue

Skin Tone: Pale

Build or body type: Skinny

Your physical description of Steph is vague. I know this is something probably only you will use, but it's still helpful to have a detailed description that you can look back on. I would also recommend having a physical description in the form of a paragraph so you can cover everything that these categories miss.

The first thing I'm going to do is link you to this: http://majnouna.deviantart.com/art/Cata ... s-33097648

It's a guide to human features, and it supplies words and pictures for a variety of face shapes, eye shapes, nose shapes, hair colors, eye colors, skin colors... it gives you just about everything you could need to describe a character. Whenever I describe a character, I open it up and use it as a reference.

Now, "blonde" isn't very specific. What kind of blonde? What shade? "Blonde" could be anything from platinum blonde to strawberry blonde. There's a big difference between those two, so you should specify. The link I gave you should provide reference for several shades of blonde.

You described her hair style as "straight" without elaborating any. Okay, so we know that her hair is straight, but is it thick? Thin? Does she keep it in a ponytail, a french braid? Does she curl it before school? I don't know; tell me!

As for glasses/contacts: you misspelled contacts, and you also didn't specify what kind of glasses she wears. There are a lot of types of glasses! Even if you don't know the name of the type of glasses, describe them. Wire or plastic frame? Square, rectangular, circular, or oval? What color? You could search "women's glasses" to get an idea what kind of frames she would wear; if you go to Walmart anytime soon, go to the place where they do vision tests and look at the frames they have hanging on the walls.

As for eye color, I would specify whether her eyes were dark or light, grey tinted or green tinted, etc.

Describing her skin tone as "pale" is vague as well. If you'd like to be more specific, I would recommend referencing the link I gave you; they list different shades of skin tones.

I also have a more general piece of advice: when using a character sheet to describe characters, add synonyms and different words you can use to describe specific features. If you do that, you'll be able to reference it when you're looking to describe the character in your writing.

For example, next to "eye color" you could list some words you would use to describe the character's eyes: icy, aqua, cold, etc. Once you're writing, you can use it as a cheat sheet!

Speech Patterns: Talk polite to people

Gesture: talks with her hands

Talking politely isn't really a speech pattern. Speech pattern refers to pronunciations, accent, and words she frequently uses. Does she talk loudly or quietly? Try specifying those as well.

You did gestures pretty well, but I would elaborate on what kind of gestures she makes.

Weakness: Seeing her father naked

I'm... confused? I don't think I would describe that as a weakness.

Mother's name: Unknown

Even if Steph doesn't know her mother's name, I would list it with a note that she doesn't know her mother. Unless she was adopted, I don't see any way that her father wouldn't at least know her mother's name.

Other Close Family: Friend and tenant Jessica

Best friends: Maria, Tim, Katy, and Green

Other friends: Everyone, really

Enemies: Her father(sometimes) and Jean(frenemy)

Who are these people? What is Steph's relationship with them? Who is Jessica, why is she living with them? What makes her like Maria, Tim, Katy, and Green so much? Why is she enemies with Jean and her father? Tell us about their relationships and how they interact.

Home Life During Childhood: She have a hard and awkward life

Hard and awkward? Hard and awkward could mean a lot of things. What made it hard? What made it awkward? How did Steph feel about it? How did it affect her? Give us some specific events from her childhood, too.

Details of Town/City: Suburbs

Give us some more details! Is the area big, small? Are the neighbors friendly? What kind of shops are around?

What did her bedroom looks like: Big, plain, and clean

Most teenagers spend a lot of time in their room, so Steph's room is probably very personal. My room is a very personal space for me, and I've decorated it as such. I have quotes like "If they give you ruled paper, write the other way" painted on my wall; I have Doctor Who posters and a coexist flag; I have a fish tank, and a hamster named Bilbo. What about Steph? What posters does she have? Does she have any of her paintings hanging on her wall? What about a white board or a cork board?

Important Experiences/Event: Meeting her boyfriends' parents, art contests she had won, and going to the concert she had sang.

If they're important to Steph, tell us about them! If they're important to her they could very well be important to your story.

Religion and beliefs: None

Everyone has beliefs. She might be an atheist, but that's still a belief; she might be confused about her beliefs, but that's still a belief.

Bad habits: Always swearing when she is in rage

Good habit: Always care about others

List more than one habit for each, and the thing you have listed for "good habits" isn't really a habit. That's a characteristic. Swearing (like you listed) is a habit, biting your nails is a habit, straightening up your room before you go to bed is a habit.

Best Characteristic: Very nice

Worst Characteristic: Getting a rage quit

These are kind of cop out characteristics. Okay, she's nice. What makes her nice? Is it the fact that she'll drop everything for someone? Is it the fact that she's good at handling conflict in a peaceful way?

What you've listed for "worst characteristic" doesn't make much sense, and I'm a little confused.

Worst Memory: Seeing her father tried to get other women who don't care about him and not to get to date her boyfriends

Try listing a specific event for "worst memory," and tell us why it was such a bad memory.

Best Memory: Dating with an actor

Oo, who is this actor she dated? What was so great about dating him?

Phew, okay! ...I think you get my point by now. I hope you post the story Steph is from here! I'd love to read it <3