Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.
Okay, I don't know if this is a right time. Well, screw it. I am still doing it.
Hi, everyone. This is Pinkie here to get you some ideas for my show. If you don't like to read it, you can leave.
Anyway, let's get this started.
I am thinking to make a TV show for me. It is hard so I am just starting with the ideas. Well, the ideas are dumb, but kind of good. Well, here are my ideas:
1. What is the name will be, Pinkie? I am going to name the TV show with my story's name: Sidney's Children Meets YouTube. Why? Because I freaking love YouTube and I don't care if you don't like it. These are my ideas.
2. Now, you are thinking to yourself, 'What it is about?' Well, I will tell you a hint: It is like Total Drama. Yup, with a lot of sh*t going on. Also, people will vote off their own teammates when they lost a challenge. A one person will win the million dollars. So yeah, it is like Total Drama 2.
3. Now, who will be the host? Well, I found one and that is Kevin Smiley. I will tell you about him. Well, he's a dick. He is an asshole toward people. He loves to look fabulous for the camera. Also, he is trying to kill them....with challenges.
4. What will it take place, you say? Well, they will be in the red carpet and the desert where they got stranded. Finally, they will go many places in the plane to do challenges.
5. How many people will be on there? Well, some will not be on the TV because they....well I am not telling you that so let's just f***k it.
6. Who are the Youtubers that will be on the show, you say? Well, I am not telling you. It is a surprise and it will be a lot of them, but I will tell you the hint: Some of them will be on there and I am not still telling who they are.
7. Is this will be great? Well, I don't know. I didn't get to write it yet, but I will soon.
8. What will it rated to? Um.....I don't know.....Maybe 16+
9. at least, will it be about Youtubers or the characters? None of them. It is about the Youtubers and my characters will be...oh, f**k it....
Anyway, these are my ideas. Well, see you next time.
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Heya, Pinkiegirl13! Wisegirl22 here for Team Plasma on Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day.
Here, this wording is a bit weird. Please fix it.
"What is the name will be, Pinkie?"
And here, a typo occurred, in the beginning.
"A one person will win the million dollars."
Here, instead of "What" I think you mean "Where".
"What will it take place, you say?"
Here, I think you meant "Will this be great?".
"Is this will be great?"
Overall, this was funny, excluding the fricking language. I loved this, but your host sounds a little extreme. Please, just choose whoever does the host for America's Got Talent.
Is this your script or just your ideas?
It is my ideas. Why you asked?
Hi PinkieGirl13! It's Thewriter13 here to give you a review
As I have said in the past, don't put yourself down in your writing. It not only takes away from the piece, but it makes me feel as if you're always discouraging yourself. Be confident! There are people here who appreciate you work.
So is this just an idea of what you'll be writing in the future? If so, I'm quite interested as to what you'll write.
I am first going to say if you could please refrain from this language. I know you rated it and all, which is perfectly fine, but I feel it's unnecessary in what you've written. You could possibly be just giving a character a trait, that trait being he or she curses a lot. If so, you can keep it. But I just felt it was a little too much for the piece.
I don't think you're ideas are dumb
Now I'm going to go through a point out the nitpicks, only because they're simple to be fixed:
"What is the name will be, Pinkie?" Should be "What is the name, Pinkie?" Or "What will the name be, Pinkie?"
"Why? Because I freaking love YouTube and I don't care if you don't like it. These are my ideas." I have a question. Are we asking the questions, or someone else? When you say you don't care, are you talking to us personally or just the interviewer? I'm only curious as to who that was directed to.
"Well, I will tell you a hint: It is like Total Drama" I'm probably out of the loop but I have forgotten what Total Drama is. It's that Cartoon Network show, right? I suggest you add a teensy bit of background on the show so people who have never heard of it know what you're talking about.
"What will it take place, you say?" Do you mean "Where will it take place?" Because you mention destinations afterwards. Just curious about that as well.
"How many people will be on there? Well, some will not be on the TV because they....well I am not telling you that so let's just f***k it." I feel this answer is very useless. It tells us nothing and the curse word is unnecessary. I hope I'm not harsh when I say this, but either give us an answer or be more precise as to why you won't tell us. I do like the mystery to the answer, however
"but I will tell you the hint: Some of them will be on there and I am not still telling who they are." This isn't necessarily hint, but rather repetition of what you said previously. Either give us a real hint or take out this sentence. Again, the mystery!!
"Is this will be great?" Should be "Will this be great?" And do you mean "Will this be a great show for people to view?" I think that's a more structured question and more specific.
"at least, will it be about Youtubers or the characters? None of them. It is about the Youtubers and my characters will be...oh, f**k it...." Again, an unnecessary answer to an important question. At least give us an answer! I wanna know who will be on it. And what do you mean by "none of them"? Be specific for this.
Anyway I really am curious as to how this story will go. Please, I hope you don't think I was too harsh as I am only trying to help you. But the idea and plot you're developing will be very interesting and very good! Let me know when you start writing!