This is great, but less lyrical methinks than the last. (The last being make me like a star.)
A slight criticism; I see no reason for the total lack of punctuation, and I think 'twould add rhythm to the piece.
A word on the message; I am glad to see a diverse range of spiritual messages in your piece, for it is all too easy to write about the same thing multiple times and just repeat the rhymes.
I think I am beginning to sense a common style to your lyrics.
My favorite is undoubtedly the title line, yet unfortunately I don't know why, it just seems so symbolic etc.
Hope this helps,
Take That You Fiend!
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