Aw, girl, I am genuinely sorry if I
Made you feel like I'm dunking
On your way of approaching
Things in your own way.
Trust me -- I can see the change in structure,
I can smell the sad frown and discontent wrinkles
Blinking with you, disheartened by the apparent
Lack of concern and sympathy for yourself.
Trust me, love, five years ago I put
A ring on your finger and you put
Yours on mine. And for five years before
That you were afraid to hold mine
Hands while walking on the road
Side by side -- but I chose to wait.
Trust me, I used to scream, "I wait, I wait, I wait,"
Till the date you'd skate up to me
And see that it doesn't fucking matter
What the world thinks of us as long as
We choose each other relentlessly.
Trust me, my love, I make fun of your cute
Words and thoughts and ideas because
I cherish them. I cherish you. Even if
You're a thousand miles away from me
Now, no matter how cheeky it sounds --
Trust me -- You are mine, and I'm yours, for
Trust is not trust which falters when it alteration finds.
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Hey, from the title, I guess I was right =D
It says so much abt their relationship and also fits so well in the poem!Now I do wonder if reading poems with storylines while having a cold is a detriment since.... I didn't notice the change in structure Jasmine is talking abt @.@ Or is she talking abt picking up on Lavender getting somewhat sad?
I really like this sequence:
Love the final line too :3
I think this one is rly cute! (And also it feels like it reveals some hint of a plot!)
this sounds somewhat like a really catchy love song and i'm all for it. the romance is clear and its easy to get into the narrators head and understand that they do love the subject, and understand how they love them. so good!!
Thanks for the comments, this poem's actually a part of an anthology that I am writing in this National Poetry Writing Month.