Lovie, it's finally time that you
Start talking 'bout the hues of
Time. I know I'm the astrophysicist
And you're the historian but
It's kind of a common ground
Between the two, ain't so?
We don't know if time is real
Or if it's a feel that reels through
Our consciousness that helps
Us see through the before and
The After. It's a mess: we don't know if
We can quantize it or if a thing
Called 'present' even exists.
Remember when we gave a history
Presentation on French Fries and I
Forgot the lines that were mine
And just went on to mime while
You talked about biscuits and World
War I and the whole class was
Entertained through our shits and giggles?
So, Physics doesn't know if that is
The past or future or present. An
Interpretation thinks the past and future
Are pre-determined, no matter the
Inertial frame. So time is really stupid --
Or, we are too stupid to get it.
But, that doesn't even matter.
I don't care if it's fate or random
Chaos that led to this moment
Where I am writing this in Google
Docs to share it with the love of
My life. I don't care if choice exists
Or not -- you are mine, and that's
All that I smile for and care about.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
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Ohh now we get more lore abt our main girls! I am so here for that! Also love how it's Lavender who brought in the space time science despite being the historian =D
Hm while I find the history lesson interesting I don't quite like how Jasmine talks abt their school presentation here. Maybe this is part of poetry my peasant (and still quite sick sighhhh) brain does not get.
I really like this line: "Or, we are too stupid to get it." It fits really well at the end of that stanza, in rhythm and meaning :3
Another surprisngly cute end to the poem despite the rather heavy and sciency topics!
Thanks for the review, Tikaya! :p
I mean, enjambment isn't for everyone, and the pronunciation/meter/stress patterns across lines are different for different people so I guess that's why?
Also, I am sorry I haven't replied to the reviews in a while, I am feeling the blues for the past few days. How's your cold? I hope you get well soon! :p
Physics And History, Common Ground. A note to invest thoughts in thesis, teachers, the can be no greater love than the love between educators. People who devout their lives to discovery and informity for community or humanity, that bond between the two can be a powerful growing energy, because there's always something to see, to gain, to earn , to learn and you never stop growing because you become (in the time you burn with trust) more than you were.
When Endlessly Growing In Mind In Connection with someone who develops you as you develop them. In each others passion the aspect of time can be without perception. Incalculable within the past, not well comprehendable within the theory of relativity.
Fate Or Random Or Random Fate
It Doesn't Matter But What Is If It's Not Choice That Welcomes Love. Predetermined thought welcomes a need of determination for reasoning. But in the resonating of souls. Mates Need Not To Care About These Useless Ideas Of Why One Would Love Another In Their Special Way Of Being And Within Reason That Resonates With The Only Thing To Care About, Who, What, Brings One The Most Joy.
PEACE✌️☮️🎭