What is the meaning of life itself?
What is the word that defines the self?
What is the simplest yet the most profound?
What is the solution that'd still confound?
Dharmachakrapravartana, Sermon on the Mount,
Jabal al-Nūr, Gita, The Dào -- all of them amount
To everything and nothing and something and none --
They all say the same, yet it's not quite the One.
It is personal and eternal, celestial and bodily,
The pinnacle of humanity that might seem a bit silly
If the thoughts aren't put to action ever readily --
It's there in the stars, and our garden lily.
Oh my dear, you may call me a pretentious wench,
You may call me a snob with a licentious stench --
Yet, let this fact never be a contentious trench,
The brightest star is right here, on our garden bench.
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I really like the final line of the poem :3
I continue to enjoy Lavender's riddles even if I have no clue what's happening in this one!
Hehe, you'd have to check out the next poem for Jasmine's amswer!
I LOVE HOW IT RHYMES AND CONTINUES WITH MEANING TO EACH AND EVERY WORD!! It's like every word has its own backstory and keeps connecting and connecting and it feels heavenly to me! Your range of vocab is also AMAZING! CHEF'S KISS AMAZING! And in the end, DON'T EVEN MAKE ME START, ITS ABSOLUTING ASCENDING! It perfectly ends it all leaving people without a single drop of disappointment! Overall, SCRUMPTIOUS (what I mean is beautiful, calming, and TRULY AMAZING!
Thanks for the review, Nataleeen! I am glad that the ideas and imagery come across well! What do you think is the one-word answer that Lavender is seeking?
I really like this, it’s nice and short. The only thing is I kind of don’t understand what you’re talking about at all… but somehow it’s still kind of interesting 😂
I like third and first part because those I kind of got the meaning of but I’m not exactly sure what you were trying to say? I mean it’s probably me, because I think each poem is written for a certain type of people who have felt or thought that exact thing and maybe I just haven’t! Either way it’s a nice piece I like your wording
Thanks for the review, foxgirl!
Well, this is the 7th poem (or, the first one of the 4th pair of poems) for the anthology of poems I am writing ("Of Lavender and Jasmine") in April, aka, the Nation Poetry Writing Month. It's about two lovers, Lavender and Jasmine, have a dialectic conversation through poetry where L asks the questions and J replies to them. This too is a riddle in the form of a poem where Lavender is seeking a one-word answer from Jasmine, and the reply is going to come out in a few hours!
Thanks again! :p