What's hard to make yet easy to break?
What's unbreakable under highest stakes?
What's most important in every relationship?
What's the meaning of every promise one keeps?
It's beyond untouchable even in impossible
Odds if it's made strong enough in visible
Appreciation and mutual respect throughout years
But may still snap in half by a moment of doubt and fear.
Thus, my love, like love -- it must be reavowed
Over and over and over and over CLEAR AND LOUD;
Like consent, the myth that it should be just assumed
If it's already been shown before -- that makes me fumed.
Well then, my fragrant Flower in full bloom, pray tell --
There's a special place, for those who abuse this, in hell --
Tell me what you think about this, in full and unhinged detail...
Because I know that you believe in it, and I do too, without fail.
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Still really under the weather but I figured you'd want me to continue this.
That's an important thing to remember! "Like consent, the myth that it should be just assumed" and it fits really well into the poem. Perfect point to being up, all alongside the next line.
Is it trust?
I like the flow of the poem. Nice rhythm and I'll find out tmr if I'm right.
Ever since the lady with the torch I keep seeing a lot of Nine in these poems xd that's probably just me tho :3
Thanks for the review, Tikaya! :p
I have no idea why you see Nine in all of my poems lol but I guess it's understandable
You could use bold to make the CLEAR AND LOUD parts really scream off the page, and use italics for the unhinged detail part to make it feel like a heavy secret. You just put two little stars around a word to make it heavy or one star to make it lean. That's just some tips no work! Anyways, this poem is CHEF'S KISS! It is truly amazing how you turned a riddle into such a serious talk about how relationships actually work. The way you describe it as being beyond untouchable but also able to snap in half is SCRUMPTILLIOUS writing because it shows how delicate and strong love is at the same time. It is extremely amazing how you compared it to consent and said it shouldn't just be assumed that is a straight up beautiful point to make. The part about it needing to be reviewed over and over is delicious and feels so raw and honest. It is outstanding how you used the fragrant Flower line to lead into that really intense warning about a special place in hell for people who abuse trust.
Thanks for the review, Nataleeen!
Great suggestions, what do you think the answer to the riddle is?