What has a little bit of everything, all of the time?
What has both pedophilia and rainbows & sunshine?
What has evil and good and the grey intertwine'?
What makes me so overstimulated that I can't find a rhyme?
It gives you the power of the world in the palm
Of your hand, it creates and destroys realms
In the Age of Information, it is the deathly calm
And the storm that comes after the psalms.
I have come to the conclusion that I will
Come back home even before the seal
Of approval comes from the ministry deals --
I don't want spotlight, I just want a hot meal.
And on this platform, my name will be shown
As the lead archaeologist who dug it from the stone.
And on this, my love, as I type on my phone --
I'll be back before May, I'll be back to our home!
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Hey Rebel, Alex is back! Just lightening my load for the actual review day at this point, let's dive right in ~
I didn't actually know this song either so I searched it on the internet and I love how the answer is always in the title
Afterwards, I read the entire poem in the song's original tune, as any man of culture should XD
I loved this line! It keeps that silly tone, while being incredibly poetic compared to the line before it. It's one thing to describe internet as having both good and bad but including the grey area was a really nice move!
It scatters my mind too, Lavender. Very relatable XD
Milestone moment right here! If this is what Lavender truly wants, I support her. I'm infact really happy for her, that she had the courage to make this decision and made it just in time as well! It makes sense for her, and a development for her character, no doubt.
I especially also love the contrast. On one hand, Jasmine wants Lavender not come home so as to bask in the glory of her career achievements. Meanwhile, Lavender loves and misses her too much to stay away any longer, just to get a materialistic honor, that means nothing in front of their long standing relationship. They're both incredibly romantic!
Oh such an impeccable end, bravo! It's concluding and yet drops something new to the narrative- being so simple yet naturally classic. It gives rise to a feeling of rush, as the two lovers are finally about to meet! It certainly has a cinematic appeal to it, where the heroine is leaving her everything behind to meet her beloved. Captures the theme of old Indian romance movies, if I dare say! =)
This might just be my favourite! Feelings of longing and joy of love are spilling from the cup so beautifully, I can feel the significance and romance from across the screen.
I also like how the theme connects to the answer, as Lavender is able to convey this happy news to Jasmine only because internet exists. It may have many flaws, but you don't deny it really connects people! <3
No critics this time, this was everything it had to be. That's all I have for now, had a great time reading. Until next time ~
Love, Alex
I am glad that you liked the poem, Alex! 😁
All of the time... (Yes yes I understand the reference)
I even know the answer. Tho I feel like starting with THIS right in your second stanza isn't exactly a good idea.
And I do like the rhyme xp
I guess knowing the song really makes you realise just how much is reference, making everything line kinda redundant.
Ohh love the way the last stanza develops and the nod that this will definitely conclude before May! That's really clever :3
Thanks for the review as always, Tika!
I mean, yeah, anyone who gets the reference in the very first line kinda unlocks the poem instantly -- it's the same for some other riddles too. " "...Power of the world in the palm / Of your hand" was supposed to be a pseudo-reference to Dr Octopus, while the last two stanzas is just Lavender talking about how she wants to come back home.