Aw, girl, you know how sweet
You are sometimes? Wait,
Delete that: you are always so
Sweet, my love, and you don't
Even know it, my Spring.
That's why I'm here for you, my
Queen, your dearest servant and
Co-monarch. Stars and pulsars
And event horizons pale in
Comparison, my Spring.
Your shadow is the only thing
That walks beside me. My
Beating heart yeets sick verses
Only for you. I say that because
I've been found, my Spring.
These days might be hard for
You, but you've faced much
Worse. Thus, remember, love:
The buds might bloom, or not,
But Spring's today, my Spring.
A vine of Chilean Jasmine climbs
A short stick beside me in my hotel
Room. Like me, it isn't from here
And uses a fake name. But in reality,
I belong to you, my Spring.
Lovie, I miss you. I miss our bonsai
Trees, senbonzakura on the roof,
Our little kitchen, the garden patch,
Our tea time -- and your Lavender smell.
I crave for you, my Spring.
I crave for you, love,
Like sakura craves the breeze,
I crave for my Spring.
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Jasmine using a fixed ending to stanzas is a great way to introduce rhymes without completely sticking to them, briliant idea to complement her style!
Also I read the translation of the Bangla poem and I definitely understand the contrasting surroundings a lot more now! Spring being more than just a season is so lovely- it's joy, love and a way of life <3 I like how Jasmine is choosing Spring here, despite not really witnessing it around her. She wants to be with Lavender, swaying with the blooming trees but writes this poem instead, portraying how her partner is her Spring - I've never heard anything more romantic. Love the many scattered cultural references!
I do think the ending could've landed better though, it just looks like it's repeating something the last line of the stanza before already conveyed well enough.
Hmmm I don't actually see the connection between riddle and solution. Might be related to how old the two protagonists are? (But then, I rather thought they were in their summers respectively xd)
I generally don't like to look up things while I read. I feel like a work should stand on its own without additional resources. And me being not smart enough to get the answer is entirely on me and not my research skills xd
Love how she corrects herself into always in the first stanza btw. It's very cute :3
Or that even event horizons cannot compare to Lavender XD
Ohh interesting phrasing of having a shadow of her lover walk beside her. It's probably related to how she's alone and sees an echo of Lavender everywhere?
Thanks for the review as always, Tika!
Uh, I am pretty sure I filled the previous poem with tons of spring imagery (sakura flowers, Kore's return to Earth, humanity made it
a lot shorter and fleeting, A thousand pink petals aka senbonzakura) related to Japan. Also, let me remind you that the southern hemisphere has autumn when it's spring in the northern hemisphere, so autumn winds striking Lavender in South Africa contrasts with their desire to enjoy the Spring flowers in their home (it should be obvious where they are from, hint: sakura flowers and bonsai and the syllabic structure of the final stanza).
"And me being not smart enough to get the answer is entirely on me and not my research skills xd"
XD I feel the same whenever I come across stuff I have no idea about lol
"Ohh interesting phrasing of having a shadow of her lover walk beside her. It's probably related to how she's alone and sees an echo of Lavender everywhere?"
Actually, that stanza is a reference to Boulevard Of Broken Dreams' main chorus, but instead of saying "my shadow's the only thing that walks beside me", Jasmine reverts that to "your shadow".
"Might be related to how old the two protagonists are? (But then, I rather thought they were in their summers respectively xd)"
I mean, they are postdoc researchers so yeah I guess. But my answer to that would be this line: "The buds might bloom, or not, / But Spring's today". It's a reference to an oft-quoted Bengali poem almost no one else in this website would get but oh well lol.
Thanks again, keep reading, and get well soon! :p
Strong yet gentle smell of desire. The continuous usage of the term "my Spring" not only evokes a picture of spring as a season but also of a growing desire for the next blooming (in a more personal sense). Strong yet gentle. One would hope that calling "my Spring" will bring back something that is missing, and it brings it in one unexpected way. Memories of time that is past. Calming, strong, gentle, and mild. This stanza of the poem "A vine of Chilean Jasmine climbs..." is interesting in the sense of tension between memory and desire. Next stanza: "Lovie, I miss you. I miss our bonsai..." captures nostalgia but gives it hope through this verse: "I crave for you, my Spring." The poem is full of strong pictures, and it does not end but continues to be written by the language of the desire for the Spring.
Thank you for sharing! Loved the poem
All the best!
Sylvanus Grace
Thanks for the review, Sylvanus Grace!