Who are under the sakura, reunited in each other's arms?
We are, my love, Jasmine and Lavender, on a park bench.
Who are sending their goodbyes to April in the form of a poem?
We are, sweetie, to welcome summer and Spring to quench.
Ah, excuse me, I am borrowing your lap for a bit.
A small pond, a sunny yet breezy day, and us together --
That's all we need. Your head on my lap in a weather
Like this to bid our sorrows goodbye and to tether
Our emotions to the migrating cuckoo's feather.
Are we the richest people in the universe, my sugar plum?
Yes, we are, cutie. We would never trade this for anything.
Are we just mere specks of stardust on a roaming rock in space?
Yes, we are, buttercup. We have been so since the beginning.
Aw, love, stop rubbing my cheeks, I am blushing so bad.
We are like little squirrels nibbling on nuts after a hard winter,
We are like free clouds making stupid faces with none to hinder,
We are like two rivers meeting each other again after a splinter,
We are two lovers showering love to each other in a poetic banter.
Did a sakura petal just boop on your nose and make you sneeze?
Yes... Don't you dare laugh! Don't you dare chuckle, Jasmine!
Did I laugh uncontrollably for five minutes after looking at your face?
YES! YOU DID! YOU ADORABLE LITTLE LOVABLE VERMIN!!!!!
Oh, look at that jiji staring at us feverishly, it's so laughable that I feel bad for him.
Ah, how I wish this could last forever. I don't want to get up.
It's fine, we can stay forever -- or at least as long as my lap doesn't give up.
Next time, you will lay on my lap and I will hold your cheeks in a cup!
Now, now, don't make me blush again or I will kiss you to make you shut up.
Why does Spring have to go, love? Is it like us, not allowed to exist?
No, love, like life, it too fades away no matter how much it wants to be.
Then, my love, why does it always come back? Why does it insist?
Because, love, like us, Spring loves life and life loves spring -- for Spring is free.
You are my spring breeze, sweetie. And you are my sakura, lovie.
We are Spring, my love.
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Hello Rebel, this is Alex, here to bid farewell to one of a kind poetry series! Who's crying, definitely not me? Before I get too sappy now, let's dive into it no wdym definitely not in the pool of our tears because I have character attachment issues lol ~
Oh, it feels like the classic 'steal one's heart', just a little bit more lawful XD. Love your own version of the phrase!
Beautifullllll I love happy endings too much for a guy who rarely writes them hehe.
You can't really tell who exactly is saying which line but perhaps it's meant to convey that all the sentiments are common? Or it could be that they're alternating and it could be taken either way really.
Oh this part is so rich in material, you've outdone yourself tying it all together!
Lol love the contrast of how the leads are fairly obvious here, and they being silly like this is incredibly endearing <3
Might not be the most orginal thing, but hey it works well!
Heavy implication here! I'm guessing it refers to how queer relationships are frowned upon? The disguise was clever and yet stands out to me so effortlessly, as if it wants to be heard so bad. Good of you to bring out real problems that are, with poetry.
Philosophically enriching! Love the way it's phrased too- simply perfect.
The grand ending may have fallen short of my expectations just a little bit. Here's the addition I suggest-
It's a bit longer but I feel it gives justice to the essence and structure. I do get it's an important choice as the final ending to your series though, so feel free to leave the suggestion out of the work if you think it's for the best. This has been a rollercoaster journey, thank you for sharing! That's all I have for now, until next time ~
Love, Alex
End of an era. I don't know what to do now that I've reached the final poem lol
I already love the title tho! I like how it already says that the two are together again and I also like the image of spring. That it implies renewal, a fresh start, maybe even a much needed break:3
I like that they are saying goodbye to the month of April xd meta commentary on the end of napo?
The juxtaposition of being everything and nothing at the same time is nice in the 3rd stanza.
I wonder if the one liners in between is whatever person is not doing the stanza? =D
The stanzas themselves also have distinct styles!
Hm but then comes the sakura boop stanza and it's clear they are changing line by line... (and everything afterward)
I was sure before they were changing speaker between stanzas. Awww
"Why does Spring have to go, love?" easy, to make room for the best season: summer :3
I am glad that you read to the end of the series, thanks a lot! :p
Actually, Lavender and Jasmine are writing every alternate line, as you later realised lol
Personally, my favourite season is Spring, and Spring in Japan is the most beautiful it ever gets so well, it makes sense for Lavender and Jasmine to love Spring -- which ends with April in Japan, traditionally speaking.
Thanks again! :p