Okay, Hello! Ryu(AKA Southbound) Here for a review!
Hey! Now, first off, I have to say good job, it takes guts to write a song. Even more to post them! Now, I was a little through off at the beginning, very little rhyme scheme, it felt like it was repeating the same thing over and over. I know it's about love and a break up(I'm fixing to post a song about mine!) and that it comes from the heart and everything, but I felt like it was not the best you could do, and that it could use a little bit of work. I'm not trying to be rude, or mean or anything, but honestly, it sounds more like a poem to me than anything, because the verses are not long, you have a small chorus, and it isn't all that big in general. I mean, bravo on the song itself, it's not the worst I've seen(a lot of rap is a lot worse), but it's not the best. If I hurt your feeling I'm sorry, I don't mean to, I'm just a blunt person and I hate it. But, keep working on your stuff, and keep writing and posting on YWS!
Sincerely,
Ryu(Southbound)Cevenost.
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