Young Writers Society

This was so sweet! Maybe it was just me, but it felt like a guy was saying this. Really weird huh? Back on subject. *straightens posture* This was a very well written poem. The ending was my favorite though. I think it put the biggest smile on my face. Told you.

I couldn't spot any mistakes, not that I searched for them, or grammar issues. If there were any, sorry about that. I usually look over stuff like that if I'm reading something really good.

There is always two things I review when reviewing. 1) Feelings: They were there, but not really. A little more drama, and then your A okay. 2) Wording: Your wording was organized perfectly, so don't worry about this one. This was an awesome poem, and I wish you good luck on the rest that you make. May you find a four-leaf clover today (or tonight depending on your time zone). I don't know why I always say that at the end... BYE!

~Laelle

Review for Team Sassy Ladybugs-

This is a great poem. I can tell you really tell you love the person you wrote this for. It's not only quirky and filled with inside jokes (the one about Phil), but it is also filled with love that any couple should share. I agree with speakerskat a little structure can go a long way, but since this is a personal poem for a specific person it matters a little less. There's really no other criticisms I can give. This is truly a beautiful poem. I tell tell that this poem was very well thought out to make that special someone very happy.

My favorite line from this poem is "But it's the mystery in you that I'm addicted to." It's just a very sweet line that I love.

Great poem overall. And as always, keep writing.

-Incohesive Scribbles

*insert draw phil naked picture here*

Hey, yo, Tigerlilly37! Strange here and I have a review for you on this fantastic review day! Let's get into this review, shall we?

I'm not a fan of romance poems, the majority of them are sappy about love and fail to sothere genre justice. They rely on simple sentence structure, repeated themes, and generic lines that fail to pull my heart strings. They rarely ever make me impressed. I don't see why they have such a big following.

This, however, was ridiculously sweet and great and all that. One of the best love gained or kept poems I've seen on here. That, right there, is astounding. I walked in here blindly, but that just made me feel happy. I want to grab my girlfriend and go dance in the meadows. You don't understand how that makes me feel.

The absolute best thing in here are your lines. The way how they could be short, but others extended is a common complaint, but it fits right in here. It adds to the volume of love. You use all of it and just pump it up to full speed to make it great. The first stanza, talking about Shakespeare and smiles could be cheesy, but it works.

The emotion in here prances around like its a beautiful Saturday out in the field and you're having a picnic. It set an atmosphere for me, and that's what I ask most out of a poem. Thank you for that.

Also, the emotion in here is awfully personal. You don't make it generic, you don't make it dumb, you make it fantastic. I felt it actually came from the heart and had meaning. This, right here, is genius. I'm glad she liked it, it truly is great.

Great job, keep writing, and stay groovy!

Review for Team Why

Oh my dear me goodness!!! I can't help it this was so amazingly stickily sweet I would give this to the person I love in a heart beat. The emotion and honesty and quirky originality here was so adorable. I really liked the first two lines because that's really how every poet feels going into a love poem, they just have to get their feelings out and want to make that person feel loved and I really do think that's what you have done here <3

Nitpicking: A little more structure would be nice, like a constant grouping of lines or rhythm just to make it easier to read ... Also, which lion ? No I'm sorry I can't even pick at this poem, let someone else do that I don;t see much wrong here.

It's so cute, my favorite line was "you are my wild card" because that's really unique to the people in this story an not what you would expect.

Thanks for this warm read
~Kat

This is beautiful. I love it so much...