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by ForeverYoung299

When I was a child,

I wanted to learn the work.

I asked her to let me learn the work

She didn't allow me.

She told, “ You can't”

When I am grown up

I don't want to learn the work.

I told her, “ I don't want to.”

She insisted.

She said, “ You have to.”

Why should this continue?

I child who wants to

Isn't allowed to.

A person who doesn't want

Is forced to.

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60 Reviews

Points: 351
Reviews: 60

Tue Feb 16, 2021 9:51 pm
Sunflowerdemon3712 wrote a review...

Okay I really liked this for a couple reasons. one being it was short but I really think it told a story that was sadly true because I think people who can tell things in short are so talented because here I am taking five hours to get my thought down only to no longer have a short story so I really aplaude this. another thing I liked was the message of course because it was true cause no matter what people always want more or to question us. Anyway in short I really liked the poem and I encourage you to keep writing. have a great rest of you day!
-sunflower demon

ForeverYoung299 says...

Thanks for your wonderful review

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Points: 183
Reviews: 109

Mon Feb 15, 2021 8:56 am
illy7896 wrote a review...

I actually really enjoyed this poetry and the bittersweet kind of representation you were going for there. This is well thought out and composed, and your rhyming structure was great.
My only critique is
'I child who wants to' could be I a child who wants to
'A person who doesn't want' could be a person who doesn't want to

But other than that, great job

I enjoyed reading this poem :)

ForeverYoung299 says...


Outside of a dog, a book is a man's best friend. Inside a dog, it's too dark to read.
— Groucho Marx