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I think I am a little too late for a review but anyway, I think I will just add this here.
ForeverYoung299 wrote:The blinding shots of colours
As bright as the blooming, blossoming flowers
They don't let me see
The spirit of spring that is set free
A beautiful and eloquent use of alliteration makes this part of the poem, but I think this is a little self-contradictory. Aren't the blinding shots of colours the sign of the arrival of the bright season of Spring? Holi is the celebration of the arrival of Spring, would it not be better to just say,
"They herald to me
The spirit of Spring that is set free..."
I think that would make it better, or you can just edit it to some other wording if you want. :p
ForeverYoung299 wrote:I fumble around
For my friends who make tons of sound
from here and there
I say, quite excited, "It is not fair!"
That's quite accurate in describing the ambience of the festival, and a clever style of alliteration.
ForeverYoung299 wrote:They care at last
There is a loud, gleeful burst
The colourful food
Arrives for our joy's good.
We nearly gulp them
The taste is the very same
As of the last year
Setting a wonderful atmosphere
Aye, food, who doesn't love good food? A good way of describing the traditional food eaten on Holi.
Although the writing is beautiful, includes a lot of imagery and alliteration and manages to provoke a feeling of a colourful festival, I feel that Holi isn't complete without the description, or at least a mention, of playing with colours. Is it because of the present situation of the pandemic?
All in all, I loved the poem, it's beautiful, eloquent, and graceful. I hope I have been able to help you a little. :p
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