Young Writers Society

Hi!

I enjoyed reading this, it's an interesting way to talk about politics. You used an analogy that I found interesting.

I was a little confused with the part "when they shot". Who was being shot, I think that would be something good to ease into your poem. Of course, this is a suggestion, I'm not forcing you or anything!

My favorite line was "Is ‘humanity’ a game?". How in the world did you come up with that? Throughout the poem, it shows character and your feelings about politices.

I hope you keep writing!

Signed,

Pineapples

This is quite realistic not gonna lie, it kind of shows the turmoil with the mood you created with several poetic devices associated with sound. Although, I don't get one thing in the poem's story actually, is the bee hive and everything else implying to someone getting shot?
I am still trying to understand the poem a little by little, but overall I really like your poem writing style.