One Cut, Two Cuts, Three Cuts, Four

Hi, ZeldaIsShiek here to review your poetry and put a stop to the wicked Werewolves' plans! May the Witches rein supreme! I am also here to critique your work to make you and your writing better as a result. I am really excited to review this poem because though I can not relate to wanting to cut myself, I have friends who have tried to commit suicide, but I helped them out of it. I really care about this poem and I want to give you the positive feedback that you deserve for writing this poem. Ready? Let's begin.

The first thing I noticed when reading this poem was the warning. It was interesting that this would be rated 18+, but I don't think that it shouldn't have been. I think 14+ would have been more reasonable, but I don't really mind either way. I don't really mind warnings. The next thing I liked about your poem was the title, which reminded my immediately of what it is like to mutilate yourself from personal experience with friends who act suicidal and cut themselves. I've found that some do it to be popular or because they think it's funny, a lot of them do it because they really are suffering with serious depression and need medical attention. I really like the rhyme scheme in this poem, and I found it quite clever how you used numbers and repetition so innocently for such a serious manner. That's all, have a nice day!

-ZeldaIsShiek

When it comes to this topic, I really do like talking about it and giving this issue light. My problem with this poem is I feel like it lacks originality. Self-harm poems are usually in a format similar to this and communicate similiar ideas to yours. So if anything, I'm challenging you to think out side the box. Don't tell me the reasons for the cuts, tell me about the cuts themselves, tell me about it from a 3rd person point of view. Add a twist to your poem, you're an amazing writer from what I can tell and I feel like you can take it to a whole other level.

Hey, man, I'm here to review your poem.

Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions.

The title says it all, and really, that's not a good thing. If you google the title of the poem, you'll find about a million poems on the same subject with the same format. The repeated line (or in some cases, counting upwards) followed by some grim comment about it.

There are too many poems about self harm. I'm not telling you not to write one, but it's very hard to write a good one that isn't just a big pile of cliches. Unfortunately, this one falls under that category. If I had a dollar for every time I heard "blood seeps red" or "slashed across your wrist," I would have a nicer house. If you're going to write a poem about this very serious subject, try to say it in a way that doesn't say the same thing as every other poem about self harm that you can see when you google it.

Don't get me wrong. I definitely wrote poems like this when I was in sixth grade and was all caught up in myself. But there are ways to illustrate feeling without resorting to this type of literature. You obviously know the literature of this genre in order to have gotten the idea for this poem. So you can think of new ways to convey the same feeling.

I hope that you find this review useful. Have a good day.

You should put a trigger warning here just letting you know

I would review this
BUT
I could review these poems instead

Cutter
Cuts

Yep.