Please don’t look at me
I see you recoil
Like I’m a disease that you could catch
I can see the revulsion you feel
I can see the disgust in your eyes
If you don’t look at me
I can ghost back to my own land
Where I cease to exist
Please don’t touch me
I can barely hold myself together
And one touch
Sends me out of orbit
I miss the contact
And the warmth of a hug
But the bonds are fraying
And I refuse
To fall part.
Pride
Foolish pride
I have to keep it together
Until life
Ceases
To hurt
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I love this!!! I always knew you to be an excellent writer!
Great work! 
So, I love the detail and action verbs used in this! This was written so well, and I guess it takes years of practice and experience! But yeah, in short, this is GREAT. It's very moving and meaningful. Some people can really read this and really see what the writer (you) was really feeling when the writer wrote this. This is definitely something I can see myself having to read in English class!
I love this!!! I always knew you to be an excellent writer!
Great work! 
So, I love the detail and action verbs used in this! This was written so well, and I guess it takes years of practice and experience! But yeah, in short, this is GREAT. It's very moving and meaningful. Some people can really read this and really see what the writer (you) was really feeling when the writer wrote this. This is definitely something I can see myself having to read in English class!
Yo, Biluata. I'm 1998.
Wow. This is really good. In a way I can understand what you are feeling in this poem. Don't take that weird in any way. I'm not trying to creep you out or anything.
Anyway, yes. Keep up the work. You are doing well. I like how you ended the poem with "until life ceases to hurt" and the way you began the poem.
Here is a tip: To add to your poem you can change the font. This poem deserves it. It is very touching, yet deep.
I can't wait 'til you write some more. Besides that you need to add some punctuation here and there, it is very well done.
Hello!
This poem is very, very good. I absolutely love the lines
"Until life
Ceases
To hurt"
Its a phenomenal way to end the poem and really adds to the overall feel.
But, like many others have said, commas and well just punctuation would be really nice.
Overall, this is an amazing poem and I can't wait to read more of your poetry.
~Makenna
LOL, WritingWolf here to give a positive review on these negative feelings.
I normally don't like to feel sad when reading poems, but the darker text and words choices you use seemed to just cut through to me. It was good, it makes the reader really feel like "wow this is really my fault.. whelp.."
Something I personally felt was that I realized that I am not a big fan of one word lines. I get the idea, lines get shorter almost like the speaker could barely.. Well speak..
You could have done "Until life ceases to hurt" as one line. Of course I get it, but I still don't.. I guess I'm not a big fan, it just looks like the poem loses substance as it goes on..
You only have one period throughout this whole entire thing.
It feels awkward and incomplete without punctuation. A lot of people I have talked to about punctuation have always gone to the defense of "oh it's my writing style." However in my eyes, it doesn't add style to the poem, it just feels very empty. It makes the reader not know how to say this all out loud. So if you could go back in and add commas and periods here and there, this thing would be freaking golden.
Your feeling in the beginning is spectacular!
It totally draws me in! It makes me think "wait what the heck did I do wrong?!" It is so detailed and us as readers could all see people going back with a stank face like "eww, that person is disgusting," and seeing that is very heartbreaking.
So freaking good, I loved it. I just needed more punctual things added in there. Thank you so much!
~WritingWolf
I liked the poem, though you need to work on your commas. The text feels... incomplete? Also, some lines could actually be joined together, like "but the bonds are fraying and I refuse to fall apart".
Hey it's TheRealOne here to leave a Real Review.
give that chilling sense of no hope to the reader.I like the poem since I can really relate to it. The imagery shows someone who feels like an outsider and just doesn't want to interact with the others, who are putting the person down.
The lines
One personal thing I would have done was combined the lines into "I can see the revulsion you feel and the disgust in your eyes". That's really all I have. Keep on writing because you have such talent.
Hello!
Stegosaurus here for a review!
This poem seems to hold a strong meaning and could related to most people. The narrator seems distant and doesn't want to enjoy nature of people. For some reason, I feel this poem is also chiche in a manner since it deals with getting away from people-- it seems to be a worn out topic most people talk about. However, it could also be a powerpoint of changing some wording into a different poem.
Mostly, you could still center is around the idea you have, which to me would be worrisome narrator who doesn't want to be hurt/seen crying. Another thing I see is the format. This is a common mistake most people make but it can be simply redone with ctrl + enter, as it can make it seem less chucky.
The flow of this poem is jolted about like. stopping. every. once. in. a. while. to. read. what. you. wrote. That could be fixed with commons or periods (since it will be flow more freely and can be more understanding). There are some chucks in this poem, as for what I have said, try making the words flow easily by connecting some words together.
I enjoyed the similes you use in here as they add to the main mood/theme of the poem.
"ghost" doesn't seem to be the correct use of the word. You are using it as a verb rather than a noun (however it work for both). Maybe "fade" or "vanish"? It is up to you, completely.
Overall, this was a good poem. There were some parts that confused me but nonetheless, with some help and rereading, this poem with be better. If you like for me to go over anything, let me know!
Steggy