>The lonely sun grows tired of blame,
Yet every dawn, it shines the same.
“Too hot!” they cry beneath its light,
Then curse the warmth that feels so bright.
>Yet there I was, still loving him,
While everyone else turned away from him.
I smiled at him when he couldn't see,
He kissed my skin unknowingly.
>I lift my eyes and gently gaze,
My caramel skin glows in his rays.
My lonely sun, please don't be sad,
I'll still love you when the world turns mad.
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Hello! This is my first time trying to write poem with rhyme scheme so don't judge it if its not good.
this has a very romantic feel to it lmao. im supposing it is supposed to be romantic but i wanted to point it out... i like the title of this poem, i think it matches the poem perfectly. also i think this would be a reallllllyyyyyy good song if you did add a few more verses (or is it just me idk) i like how flexible this is with it's imagery and meaning? i think you could sort of keep your own perspective while reading this (sort of like projection) but reading the poem *neutrally as possible* i do have to say it realllyyy seems like the writer is glorifying the person who's referred to as the sun. i think this is really creative, this poem would be REALLY good literally AND metaphorically i love it!!!!!!!!!
Tqsm. Check my other poems too i hope you gonna like them
It is really good if it is your first. It has a really nice structure that makes it easy to read. I did have to read it twice to get what you meant exactly with the kiss he gave unknowgly. But it was still very good. I would defenitly encourage you to try make an other one.
Thank you. Check my other poems i hooe you gonna like them too