you were never mine,
but somehow,
my mind became an endless tide—
pulling through every shifting season,
every passing month,
and my heart became a ticking clock,
striking your name
every hour, every minute,
every second
of loving you,
missing you.
maybe you can never know
how much i loved you.
at the end,
while closing my eyes,
i would whisper your name—
wishing that when i opened them again,
i could see your dark eyes
that i saw in the beginning.
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Loved this one. "You were never mine, but somehow" is such a quiet gut punch of an opening. The tide and ticking clock images are my favorite part, and that ending, whispering their name and hoping to see those dark eyes again, ties back to the title perfectly. It feels real, not forced. Really nice work! ❤️❤️❤️
Thank you
Your poem, "Your eyes were everything," is so good! It’s seriously such a tender, vulnerable piece that really captures what it feels like to hold onto a quiet, unrequited crush 🔅
Opening with "you were never mine" right off the bat hits so hard ☁ It instantly gets across that bittersweet, distant feeling. I love how you play with time here—contrasting that endless tide in your head with your heart ticking away like a clock. It perfectly paints that feeling of constantly being flooded with memories while every single second drags on when you miss them.
The all-lowercase formatting gives the whole poem such a cozy, private vibe—like reading a late-night note or a page torn straight out of a journal 🐟
By the end, when you talk about closing your eyes and just wishing you could see those dark eyes from the very beginning, it honestly hits right in the chest ☀ We’ve all wanted to rewind back to that initial spark, even when we know things have changed.
When I reached "maybe you can never know," my gut just wanted the line to pause and linger a bit longer before moving on. But honestly, as it is, it's such a relatable, pretty piece. Definitely keep writing!
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