If I had to be in a dark room to have you, I would happily stay in that darkness because every time I close my eyes, I see your shining eyes and bright smile.
If I had to live without oxygen to have you , I would quietly live only with your memories in my heart because they make my heart breathe.
If I had to stop loving you for your happiness, I would rather close my eyes with your unforgettable memories and leave this world. Instead of stopping myself from loving you.
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Beautiful piece, shows what love truly is, and I truly think it is pretty good.
I do think you used to word 'because' a little much right here in comparison to the length of the piece, but I do really like this line
especially where you said 'instead of stopping myself from loving you' because that takes it to the next level.
great job, keep up the good work
-PikeFisher4Life
Thank ya so much. Am glad you liked it