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crushing beneath the weight

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postmalone
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holy fuck this made me cry

Screw that I've been crying for awhile but shit this just made my tears come hotter and faster.

why do your poems toy with my emotions like this..it hurts because it's real and all too familiar and I hate feeling like this and going through this..

marms, i love you and your dense beautiful heartbreaking emotional poetry and your personality and your wall posts and everything

thank you for making me cry like, I know its weird to say that but thank you I needed this..

awweee np <3 i've been super emotional lately thank to boy and other stuff ;-;

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Brooklyn Review

Hello Marms,

Your poem is really heart-felt and I could understand the meaning of it. This specific poetry showed what's it like in some people's lives and what they still try to offer to people. Your heart and mind really showed the emotions in different ways. The details in this poem were exquisite. I especially appreciated how you didn't just say "she was crying" you mentioned how "eyes red-rimmed with self-hatred". Keep up this work. I'll be sure to do another review on your work soon.

-Brooklyn

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RishabhParmar
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Hi,

Good job. You did an excellent work. It is a good poem with lots of feelings. You worked on details. In the first stanza, it is clear how imaginative you are. You have a good thinking. Good mindset. and gift of feeling things. You felt them in a right way. This poem is positive. You showed good optimism. The best thing about this poem is it's starting.

Keep up the good work.

:)



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