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Your poem really connected with me...on many and I mean many levels, I can relate to the emotions I'm getting. The sadness yet happiness in overcoming your individual goals, though not together but separate, its truly inspiring. Also how you feel for that person, and the way you put it into words really does show your strength. A phenomenal job and I'm speechless on how it relates to some things in my life. I love your poem and your details gave it a voice.
thank you c:
Hello
good job once again
To start off, I would like to commemorate you for writing such a great poem, it definitely caught my attention, which poems typically don't so good job. Overall, reviewing poems is probably the hardest art form to criticize because it is very personal. I would just like to say that your format is very interesting and made this poem unique. My only critique is that this sentence:
"I distanced myself to save myself" Is just a little awkward because you used myself twice, but like I said, poetry is very self awarding so if you did that on purpose please let me know
thanks!
hi
I'm back. I just wrote my own poem, the first one I've ever shared with people and I have to commemorate you because poetry is not easy
Beautiful
thank you!
This was so good! I don't think I can help you out by writing a review because I can't find anything to give some constructive criticism on and because I'm not very skilled when it comes to reviewing poetry, but I just wanted you to know that I thought it was an amazing poem. I love how positive and powerful it was! It definitely deserves to be in the literary spotlight!
thank you so much Mage! <3 i hope you're having a great day c:
You're welcome! I hope you're having a great day too.
This poem is amazing and powerful. I rarely like poetry and it's hard for me to like poems but I liked yours. Below are a few things I noticed. Keep up the good work
You say 'crashing again my trunk'. I'm guessing you mean 'against'
I also personally do not understand some of the spaces like the second and fourth line
'I' 's should also be capital unless this was done on purpose
in the second stanza you say 'little water I had and grow'. To me 'grew'would fit better, but that is up to you.
The 's i n g' part is cool but I do not understand why you chose that exact word.
oh you're right about against! i think i choose 'sing' because it has a sort of rejoyceful, happy, relieving feeling to it when you say it or hear it. thank you for your review c:
I have no words.
This is beautiful.
thank you <3