S.O.S I'm killing myself,
with the childish games I play.
Having sex without protection,
Pulling out before I...
I risk my life by smoking,
my endeavour to look cool.
I go through 50 sticks a day,
fucking hell I rule!
I'm tempting fate by driving,
and speeding down the roads.
Gunning 100 down the lanes,
turning U-break holds.
I Invite the reaper to my room,
when I lock the door to shoot up.
Saved some cash with a needle,
I found, don't know who had it last.
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S O S S O S S O S
My distress I will proclaim out loud,
wont someone help me please?
I try to save myself as best I can,
But danger is got with ease.
S.O.S I'm killing myself,
with my random acts of greed.
I'll grow fat on twenty whoppers,
when one sandwich is all I need.
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S O S S O S S O S
I hope you receive my transmission...
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I couldn't resist... another catchy title was calling my name.
Like Swottielottie said, this subject is used a lot! But you did it in such a creative way, I can't help but applaud. The voice throughout the poem was strong and present, and the execution was flawless. Also, that was line was brilliant.
I have nothing more, except to say you are one exceptional writer.
Darn you and your catchy titles and your awesome poetry!
AWESOME!!! i loved it!!
this was a really great peice of work. the emottion and feeling that one gets from reading it was amazing. some ppl may not appriciate a peice like this but you have to be able to connect with what is happening. it really reaches out and forces you to feel. as far as im conserned there is no need for change. it has all the right edge to it!!
keep it up!
This was certainly very powerful! The rhythm was very strong and the ryhming was done well. This sounds like it should be a song or something. One thing I suggest is that you maybe put something else at the SOS/chorus part, it seemed a bit lacking, if you know what I mean? But you don't have to do that, its just my opinion.
Very powerful (XD) and well written but, this subject has been used a LOT! But, still very good.