I'm just experimenting with form and structure here - 
Imagine for a moment,
someone loves you,
that you are beloved.
...You will never be the same again.
Imagine all memories,
change into something,
else entirely - new.
...Some how distorted in soft focus.
Imagine that the world,
could always be like this,
reaching everyone here.
...An embrace welcoming all creeds.
Imagine death came not,
to the doors of the good,
letting the wicked perish.
...That he did his purpose as it should.
Imagine that this poem,
would never run through,
an infinite ream of verse.
...Living in a world with only imaginings ~
Is our only option,
for my musings
will never come true.
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Hey!
Alright, so I'm not really good at critiquing poetry, I just like to read it so I'm sorry I don't really have much to say that's constructive, there was just one thing which i thought I'd suggest...
I think you should put 'new' onto it's own line entirely so it's something like:
change into something
else entirely-
new
That way the structure of the stanza reflects what the line is saying. The way the line flows into the next seems to show how it's changing, and then by putting 'new' on it's own line it gives more on impact and a sense of something new
Just a thought
Sofi.