Girls just wana' have fun

Very different and unique. Gives you a kind of different look on the 'chic' trend of nightclubbing.

I like some of the phrases, like 'the evening’s vain festivities now done', and 'Her designer dress was fine and lavish/ an Armani singlet now torn and ravaged'. It gives the poem the perfect feel to it.

The only thing I really have to say would be your ending. It breaks off the flow very abruptly, though I can't tell if that's intentional or just cramming in the last two lines.
The second from the last line doesn't make any sense just by itself, and the last one seems to appear just out of nowhere. Perhaps changing it around might make it flow better.

Otherwise, very good job .

This is really good and hard hitting too! It reminds me of the adverts that have started to come on TV here in England where people get ready for a night out like the would probably come home when they were drunk. Very nice.

I particularly liked; "Her designer dress was fine and lavish an Armani singlet now torn and ravaged." The flow and rhyme of this worked well, even though the do not fully rhyme correctly, so top marks to you.

You crammed those syllbales in the lines in a few places though and this kind of jumbled the flow a little, but not majorly. Just thought I'd point it out

Happy writing!

kris wrote:She wondered the lonely sodden city streets,
the evening’s vain festivities now done.
Light caught in a pool of vomit ((comma))casts her face
sneering at her doppelganger below, ((period))
distorted by chunks of innards and bile.

So elegantly made up ((too colloquial, try and rephrase it)) was her visage
turned vile and curdled in the mirage. ((this rhyme works, but just a friendly reminder that rhyme is anything but necessary))
Her designer dress was fine and lavish
an Armani singlet now torn and ravaged. ((these last two lines are obviously forced. the word fine is awkward, despite it fitting the context. Now is also uneeded))

Now tired of her grotesque reflection,
she continues ((comma or semicolon)) her weak ankled stumbles
into the night, numbed from ten WKDs.
Cocaine still present on her credit card.
A black Honda pulls up beside her – “Get in”

Hey!

Firstly, I think the title should be 'Girls just wanna have fun'.

She wandered the lonely sodden city streets,
the evening’s vain festivities now done.
Light caught in a pool of vomit casts her face
sneering at her doppelganger below,
distorted by chunks of innards and bile.

Now tired of her grotesque reflection,
she continues her weak-ankled stumbles - 'Weak-ankled' needs a hyphen.
into the night, numb[s]ed[/s] from ten WKDs,
cocaine still present on her credit card.
A black Honda pulls up beside her – “Get in.”

I like this. You have great word choice... but there are certain places where this can be improved, in my opinion.
Comments and suggestions in red!

kris wrote:She wondered the lonely sodden city streets,
the evening’s vain festivities now done.
Light caught in a pool of vomit casts her face
sneering at her doppelganger below,
distorted by chunks of innards and bile.
Wondered? Do you mean Wandered? Even if you do mean wondered, it doesn't fit. And also, this line isn't a very strong opening. I suggest removing it altogether.
Another suggestion is re-wording that third line. It sounds akward.

So elegantly made up was her visage
turned vile and curdled in the mirage.
Her designer dress was fine and lavish
an Armani singlet now torn and ravaged.
Visage, Mirage... Lavish, Ravaged... sounds like a rhyme scheme. I don't know if this was intended or not, but I suggest a re-write. Nothing too big, just switching the words up instead of replacing them. Like I said before, I like your word choice.

Now tired of her grotesque reflection,
she continues her [s]weak ankled[/s] stumbles
into the night, numbed from ten WKDs.
Cocaine still present on her credit card.
A black Honda pulls up beside her – “Get in”
Nice ending. Me likey!