Music.
Who can explain why this rhythmic magic carries us all away?
Not I.
But I can thank it
because it's saved me
from myself.
Music soothes me.
Creating it cleanses me.
It washes away the bad things
the bad thoughts
the anger I hold inside
the need to be heard.
I close my eyes
and listen to the world surrounding me.
And then, I shut it out
and let myself drift away
into the world of music
where I am free.
I'm the wind, rushing through the trees.
I'm the sea, crashing onto the shores.
I'm an eagle, soaring through the air.
I'm a summer day, full of possibilities.
But most of all, I'm free.
Music is freedom to me.
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Hey creativity!
I really like this poem. It is very easy to relate to and very true. Music is freedom and I don't think anyone knows or will know why ever. I can't see any faults in this and think it is great!
I think this last line was a great summary and explained why you chose the title of your poem. The rest of your poem was equally good and I was eager to read if from the very first line
Deanie x
I really like this poem. It's just the first stanza and the second line. it seems sort of awkward to have a really long line while the others are super short, don't you think? But otherwise, I'm luvin' it!!!
GREAT JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!!
~Kat
I really like this poem, and can totally relate to it. Music IS freedom. My favorite stanza is the last one, it's got some great images. Nice work.
I really liked this piece as a hopeful music artist and thought the words really came from the heart. i thought there were no bad points to it! Its AWESOME!!!
Hi I'm Kenzie and I'll be reviewing your lovely poem today. ^-^
First of all, I think that this is pretty good, I love the idea of it, however, I noticed some mistakes in punctuation, or parts where you could have added more.
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Nice job!
~Anchor
Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked what I wrote. It's awesome to have someplace to post my work where I can share it with other writers and get their input. I'm so excited that I found YWS!
This was a sweet poem! I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I love how you strucutred it and it had a great flow to it, even if the second line of the first verse was a bit too long. Anyways, I loved how you used music as a metaphor and for a simile. It was also cool to be describing it as an object of freedom, which was original.
Hoped that this piece of garbage review helps to merit you and distinguish you from other writers. Have a nice day!
First of all, welcome to YWS! Glad you could join us. =D (And) Yay! A music fan! I love music too, so naturally I was drawn to your title. I really enjoyed this piece, it was good and you made great points. It was simple, and yet it conveyed your message very well. Although, I advise that you explore more words so you'll be able to make your work more interesting. The other thing is that you forgot a lot of punctuation.
Otherwise, good job. I'd love to read more of your work!