I'm A Jesus Freak

I really liked it and can relate because my closest friend is a Christian. She tells me all about Jesus and God and I believe too. You're completely right throughout the whole piece and I can't wait to read something else by you. Good job and good luck.

creativityrules,
I'm a Christian, and I feel this struggle all the time. It's really comforting to know that there are such devout Christians like you out there keep on in your strong faith, it's so inspiring!
Magpie

Wow, I loved this poem. The emotions and story were really true.

So, you believe in God?
Then make him make my momma come back.
I can't, I say. [color=#FF0000here ] You may want to add quotes to clarify that you are speaking [/color]
You look at me like I'm stupid.

So, you're a Jesus Freak?
Tell me, why don't he bring the soldiers home?
I can't, I say. here, too
and you look at me like I'm an idiot.

You know what? I'm a Jesus Freak,
and just because I believe in Jesus doesn't mean I've become him.
If you believe in fairies, does it mean you've become one?
No! It does not! Do I make my point clear?

Why do I believe in God?
Well, why do you believe that when you buy a can of soup,
soup is what's going to be inside, and not Oreo cookies?
If you can have faith in a label plastered to a tin can,
an adhesive sticker manufactured in a factory overseas,
then I can have faith in Jesus, who is everlasting. I found this stanza cleaver and intresting

Do you think that just because I'm a Christian, my life is perfect?
No! It is not! I'm still human, aren't I? so true!
You think that I don't get depressed, angry, or lonely?
You're so incredibly wrong.
I'm just a scared girl who's found some hope left in this world,
and I cling to it like a shipwrecked sailor lost at sea.
As long as I hold on, I'll survive. I'll hold onto Jesus.

Creativityrules,

Nice one! The poem was clearly heartfelt and genuine, and I like that in a poem. I do have a few minor quarrels, however. I thought at times the flow was off, and I know it probably wasn't meant to flow, but I just had a thought that maybe you could look at expanding and branching away from the poetry aspect of this piece, and maybe transform it into something more essay-like, if you know what I'm saying. I think if you put it into just one or two big paragraphs it would be excellent to read, simply because of the content.

Anyway, I liked the poem, you made your points very clear, and I liked the repetition in the first two stanzas.

Keep up the good work!

Angus