Wow, I thought this poem was so powerful and truthful. I love the ending. And I like the part about the cemetary being a wave of gravestones. Such great imagery! It reminded me of the time I went to Arlington's National Cemetary. It makes you appreciate veterans of war that much more.
My only complaint was your opening lines:
The sound of blades and guns and bombs
Leak from the battlefield
I know you are trying to compare the sounds leaking out like blood from the soldiers eyes, but I am not sure leak is the proper word to describe how it sounded. I mean, you are talking about loud noises. Loud noises don't leak out. They deafen. They boom. They vibrate. Get what I am saying?
Other than that, I thought this poem was brilliant.
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