Wow! Okay nice!
I see you've definitely have a point behind these blanket of fine art.
This a major problem in the lives of teens and children.
Overprotective parents and abusive adults.
But it was confusing when I read to this line
'they don't even'
'know its smoke'
Are you referring to the friends not knowing the father as a smoker
Or are you trying to say that nobody knows the smoke of the fire?
Totally confusing the poem and disrupting the flow of
this would-have-been-better poem.
But overall its was a well crafted piece of art.
I especially like the last bit of stanzas, you definitely
spiced the whole whole poem!
Cheers!
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