Hi there! Just dropping in a small review for you!
Warning; Since i'm new to this whole thing and writing itself, I am not too critical about my reviews because of my lack of experience, oops!
But before I say anything else I want to say that i love how I was able to imagine what was going on (like the setting and mood) through your tone and choice of words. I love poems like these because they are so deep and can mean multiple things.
I enjoyed how you tried to make it rhyme a bit, and I do also love how the "lack" (< feel like that word doesn't capture what I am trying to say) of words throughout the poem easily show a setting and the scenery you tried (and succeeded!) captivate to all of us readers. This poem really caught my attention and made it delightful to read and create an image in my mind.
Though the breaks and the structure was a little bit all over the place, I guess it just depends on how the reader reads it :3
But otherwise this was/is a beautiful poem all together, keep up the amazing work and I look forward into reading more
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