Eat me.

Willow C. here, What do you think of pizza-fish?

Yeah, I though so...

Anywho, I liked this poem, it was very intriguing and funny.

I start at the title. It was good, brief, relevant, and interesting.

Next, I'm not going to look over grammar because I'll get it all wrong, so now I look over the way things were said. Rhythm is important because when someone is reading the poem out loud it keeps the poem easier to read. In this poem some of the words are ruining the poem's atmosphere. A can of tuna, if you consider it, would be a little less articulate. Consider the following...

The wanderer was at two days with no water.
Lights danced in front of his eyes.
Suddenly, while looking at a small bush,
The leafy bush began to talk...

"Wanderer...Wanderer." it called.
"I do not comprhend what is happening..." he said back.
"You are dying..." the bush whispered again.
"Quite so..." he said back.

...See if the wanderer was dying of thirst he wouldn't have the brain power to use a large vocabulary. Simarly an expiring can of unadequate tuna would speak like a child. A small dejected child.

Other than that it was good.

-Peace out
~Willow C.

It left me thinking. It can actually be interpreted in different ways. To me, it corresponds with someone who is being bullied, and is tired of it. It's just saying that he/she doesn't care anymore, and that people are going to have a hard time affecting him/her. The part that really left me thinking was 'with a pride of being
a little too hard to swallow'. The person who was once soft and caring, has been hardened and made strong, due to the harsh words of others, that will no longer be able to have an impact on his/her life.

I may be interpreting this in a completely wrong way, but that's just one opinion

I understood this poem to be somewhat of an extension or explanation behind the meaning of the expression 'eat me'. About how it's used when the person might be a little off, imperfect or wrong, but you can't just deal with it.

Huh?

The last part didn't flow too well, but when I read it, I felt like it was doing this:

\ /
\ /
\ /
\ /

and I thought that was cool (that was what it looked like to me in my head, supposed to be a cone). The title made me laugh and so did the poem. The part that was a little confusing was the part about people having angry expressions. Is it because of the smell of tuna that people seem angry? But nice poem!

A funny poem, very amusing.

It's always good to meddle with the most innocent of topics, especially cans of tuna. Haha. But although the poem was impressive, it didn't always flow.

For instance, I thought this sentence dragged on a bit, and was a bit chunky, if you catch my meaning;

" So give me a break,
Laden expressions
Of anger is unneeded."

It just doesn't sound right, perhaps adjust the last part of the sentence a bit?

Also, "Made" should be "made".

Haha. Good job though, keep up the amusing poem writing.

Legy.

Hi hi! Yazi here to review
This poem made me laugh because I've never read anything like it.
It was so random and so original and that's what I like best about it. It's hilarious that you had so much to say about being a can of tuna! I wonder where your inspiration came from...
I like your poetic style, the poem didn't drag on and it wasn't too short either.
The only thing I can say is that there are comas in some places where they shouldn't be, for example "A little too hard, to swallow." That was kind of weird for me to read.
But I love love love your poem!