Hi ImHero! Sparkle here to review!
Firstly, wonderful use of vacillated! That's not a word you hear every day. This poem portrays a very poignant sense of sorrow that is beautiful and haunting.
I agree with niteowl about the line 'stepping the streets'. It seems a bit awkward and confusing, especially since the rest of the poem is so beautifully done.
The flow and rhythm of this poem are wonderful, but the grammar could use some work. I don't really have much else to say that former reviewers haven't already said, so I'll leave it here.
Good work, keep writing!
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