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by HolographicLadybug

Published November 11, 2015

E - Everyone

In Pile of Forgotten Things

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Comments & reviews · 5
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AllisonArgent
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AllisonArgent wrote a review Review · Dec 10, 2015

Loved it . awesome actually first I kinda thought it would be like three awesome horror stories so I'm like clicking it like all ready to be scared and the BOOMMM...I thought damn , it gave me a slight disappointment when I read the first one but when I got to the second one god REALLY? I would love to do that I'm like my principle just changed let's see how she reacts to practical jokes. The the third god SERIOUSLY? why'd u tell me that? I'm always worried about this kinda blck figure and stuff and No! your profile picture did'not help me not even a bit.

My new picture (which I switched to a couple of days ago) is probably helping less than my old one! Heh.
Thanks!

xv0nillaWriterx wrote a review Review · Nov 14, 2015

Wow when i click on your story i thought you going to write 3 full story but you wrote 3 stories that is together and short. It could be comedy in the 2nd story when you scared your principle that will be funny. The 3rd story is creepy when you tell someone to run but it is too late. The 1st story was like kind of normal. I still like it and the book could be comedy.

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Djinn
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Djinn wrote a review Review · Nov 13, 2015

Ah, so very refreshingly light yet dark. Despite the other reviews, I fully appreciate the odd filing as it makes it that much more humorous (like a cherry on top). The title made me want to skip it since I had no idea how to interpret it, but then I saw the tags: "Humor, Horror". That made me smile and think of campy horror flicks and I clicked it. It's an odd piece as one would expect from the tags and title. For some reason, I can't fathom the purpose. Is it an expose of all horror movies, is it supposed to be suspenseful, is it to connect to the reader in some intimate way? I was slightly confused and wondering if it's all a joke...but a joke on me. So, yeah, maybe I am scared now. I wish you would post a follow-up comment about your thoughts on this and intentions. Is it an ill-humor joke or something deeply rooted in our sense of community that the mere suggestion of us being afraid or should be afraid makes us that way? Overall, I liked it. It gave me a smile and doubt to my own being all at once. Perfectly odd and fits the contradicting tags of Humor and Horror the way suspense music makes you anxious even when you know it's just the music and not the action that makes you sit at the edge of your seat. Quite a good parody.

Thanks for the review!
Here are my thoughts and intentions:

My intentions were simple: something totally random that may or may not give a glimpse into a character that I have invented.
I am meaning for this to be nothing but entertaining for people.... Ok, a little creepy, too. This is really all a slight randomness that I have invented.

Pleasure answering questions,
-Holographic Ladybug

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Biluata
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Biluata wrote a review Review · Nov 12, 2015

Hello there! Luata here for a review! First off, to address what Pernicus stated in the review below, I think you didn't file this piece with the correct tags, I'm not entirely sure what I would file this under, but...erm....I would file it under something different then horror and humor, considering the two really do not find themselves in the same piece often.

Also, like Pernicus also stated, I have no idea how to review this kind of piece, but I will give it my best shot. My apologies if I come off to harsh so please take this suggestions as you like.

I think you should label that chapters as something other than story one, story two, and story three. Chapters are important and the title for chapters can either work for you or against you and in your case, the chapter titles definitely work against the piece.

I apologize if this was a joke posting, but you posted it, so I am going to review it like a real work, so if it is a work, I apologize for assuming it was a joke posting. :/

Also, the ending was ... anticlimactic and cheesy, I would suggest rethinking the idea altogether.
I hope to see more of your writing in the future, mayhaps something a bit more serious....
write on!
~Luata

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Pernicus
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Pernicus wrote a review Review · Nov 12, 2015

I really have no idea how to review this but let me give it a shot < . >
I'll review it as a funny story instead of a horror story due to the tag and the direction you seemed to be trying to go. To start off, it isn't funny. Humour is of course subjective but I found this distinctly unfunny, I am aware that this is probably a joke post, but if you didn't need those 200 points you could've given them to someone who would've put them to good use. To me this humour is pretty edgy and not funny though I'm sure this could perhaps make someone laugh. Even if this was just for the giggles I really don't see why you did it. Story one is pretty bad, story two isn't a story and story three was just pointless. None of them were funny even in their emptiness. I'm sure you can do better than this crappy humor so my advice is go out and do better.



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