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Hola HolographicLadybug =) FallWolf here for a review!
This is amazing! Okay, really, that's all I can say. This is awesome.
The plot, check. You have introduced the characters well, and added just enough answers to keep the reader satisfied, and just enough questions to keep them reading =) Bravo!
Description, check. Though your first chapter was much more descriptive than this one, this is okay =) I would just suggest a bit more detail about the tiger village.
Uniqueness, check! Neon tigers, love =3
Suspense, definitely check! I can't wait to read your next chapter =)

... I did think that your dialogue could use some work though. When Sasha is talking to Turret... it just didn't quite click. Of course, I may be wrong, but just in case, here's a link to a really awesome blog post with tips to writing dialogue =) http://www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors. ... -dialogue/

Hi HolographicLadybug, Felistia here with a review on the second chapter of your novel.

The story: The story has definitely picked up a notch and is starting to become very interesting and exiting. I like that we are probable going to be in Lumia for the most of the story is I am not mistaken. Over all the chapter does seem a bit rushed and could be expanded. I feel that the first chapter should maybe be a prologue since it doesn't really straight forward connected to this chapter, but that is your choice. I love that the tigers have their on village, it is very creative

The characters: You introduced a few characters on this chapter and they are for the most part quite good. The part about Sasha being a fire tiger of some kind is a very interesting twist to the story. I look forward to where it goes from here.

The setting: The way you describe the setting in this chapter is not as good as the last chapter. It is still good, but there are a lot of places that you could place more description in, like between dialogue. I like how you described the sky in the rain storm, though you used sky a little to much, so that it felt over used.

There is one spelling mistake I picked up on in the sentence (Other tigers were forming hunting patrols near the entrance, their flesh rippling with muscled.) I think you meant rippling with muscle.

And that is it for the review. I look forward to the next chapter and will carry on following your story. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.