I stand here and look at you,
but you seem so far away.
I've always admired you,
but you don't even know my name.
I've talked of you a thousand times,
but words cannot describe
The feelings I have felt for you,
this long time.
And if I ever see your face,
the butterflies race.
Oh how I wish for a warm embrace,
and to hear the voice I always crave.
But this just cannot be,
you and me.
for simple words cannot bestow,
the feelings I so dearly hold.
For you don't even know my name,
so it's just all the same.
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I had it in stanzas but they would go from two to four and I didn't think anybody would like that.
Thanks for the review. I will go back and edit it to see what you think.
Hello,
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Im glad to be your reviewer for today
ASnywho, about your poem, the flow seems to be choppy and short. It flows then it doesnt then it does again. Very confusing for the reader. Also the last line just doesn't belong. I think this needs to be re-written into stanzas. Maybe that'll help you focus on the flow better.
Good try:)
_Tiffany