Hello Biluata! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at lyrics but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
Oh, dang, this is beautiful. I love it so much!! Totally deserves the like.
With that aside, some of the lines aren't your strongest in the world. I feel like they were just put there for the rhyme and not for the benefit of the song. Still, your song is powerful. Imagery and everything else other than grammar is professional and just plain used amazingly.
However, you do have trouble with dashes. Here's an article to help you with those: Em dashes. Please note that if you use em dashes on YWS that you put a space before and after it.
Good job and keep up the great work
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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