Hey there! Plume here, with a review!
I really enjoyed this poem!! It's quite intense, but that really suits the vibe you've got going on. You had great imagery, and the dialogue peppered in as poetic lines was super great too.
One thing I really enjoyed was your word choice. Every decision felt super intentional and really served to continue to build the atmosphere presented in this poem. In your first stanza, words like "devour" and "possesses" are super great at conveying the dark mood of the poem and the sort of monstrous corruption it holds. You have used a less intense verb, but I think the ones you chose did a phenomenal job. They crafted the poem as this sort of inhuman/eldritch terror combined with doomsday, and I really enjoyed reading it.
This poem definitely had the feeling of a corruption arc. The "he" in it seemed like maybe he used to be someone the narrator trusted but then something corrupted him (the thirst for power, maybe?) and now he's only concerned with his goals. It has a distinct end-of-the-world vibe to it as well, I think with the whole thing being called "catalyst" plus that one line of "don't you want to be a catalyst?" I know you marked this as supernatural, but I think it could also be an abstraction/perversion of everyday betrayal/corruption.
Also, I want to commend your storytelling ability! I think it can sometimes be hard to tell a story in poetry form unless it's like, an epic or a tiny little children's rhyme, but you did a great job of maintaining poetic structure while still conveying actions and dialogue. It was super interesting to see how you crafted a really compelling story through the form of a poem, incorporating imagery to show the movement of the scene.
Overall: really nice work! I think this was a super dark and intense poem that was a complete joy to read, and I really hope to read more of your work. Until next time!!
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