Timely and skillfully-written poems such as this one are very rare. This one is a beautiful poem about humanity’s indifference toward the environment and how some of us are not heeding a call to action in order to fix things before they are irreparably broken!
The vocabulary flows smoothly and the organization of the poem progresses logically and coherently. The tone is mysterious, and the urgency of the situation is conveyed very forcefully via references to mythology. Personification of the Earth via claiming that it is seeking revenge upon its human assailants is used. The comparison of mankind to a child that needs to grow to responsible maturity is very appropriate. The urging it to cease crying like a bruised child and act like an adult expresses the deep concern felt by those of us who feel that time is running out.
Punctuation suggestion
But most of all[,]
....the siren’s song [.]
....does not quake[.]
But most of all[,]
....for an excuse[,]
.... face[-]to[-]face
To be faced with the soul....
To encounter the soul....
That prevents the repetition of the word “face ”which was recently used twice in the idiomatic expression of face-to-face.
Besides these minor points, the poem if excellent! Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Points: 2199
Reviews: 31
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