Young Writers Society

Oh wow…this poem scared me a bit.(In a good way) I thought this was about an angel getting rejected and sent to Hell,from the title,but after actually reading it,I think it’s about holding on to negative traits about yourself,because those are the only things you have.Maybe it’s about being destroyed by your own dark thoughts.Either way,I loved the poem.I hope you have a nice day/night.

Your girl climing out of the jewelrybox for a short review.

I like the chilling imagery. I think the rhythm could be changed a little, unless you are going for free verse, in that case the rhythm is definitely okay.
This line has a large effect: "Unloved by either. Hated by both"
Since you said it is based on your story, I probably would understand the poem better if I read the context, but out of context the poem seems like maybe a few words tweaked would help it. From my understanding of the poem, it sounds like you are an entity of heaven and hell like this character is unwanted by both 'worlds'. If that is so, then the title "Hell's Angel", which suggests that this character is of both 'worlds' and it fits really well. I might be reading this poem wrong, but this is how I interpreted it.

I loved this deeply intriguing poem and I hope you keep writing. <3

This is Gem climbing back into her jewelrybox.

Little's here for a review!
Well, you got me wanting to read your book! I enjoyed this poem... It has many different levels, whether that was intentional or not. To me, the poem related to certain moments in my life when I felt unloved by everyone and like there was a beast inside of me that wanted to destroy all that I loved.
The imagery is simply spectacular. I see everything like it's happening in front of my eyes. The vivid description is fantastic. You've painted a masterpiece for the inner eye.

Unfortunately, I found that some parts are annoyingly vague or random. They don't connect with the earlier lines. The second half of the first stanza appears to be random. I don't really see that much connection between the two halves. Maybe it's just me.
A few grammatical mistakes are present, but seem accidental ones, so I won't point them all out to you.

I'm glad you didn't use a rhyme scheme for the poem; it would have inhibited yourself if you had used one.

I really don't have anything to say! It's a really well written poem, and I hope to see more of it's kind around soon!
~Lee

I like the vivid imagery. I think the cadence/rhythm might be adapted a little, unless you are going for free verse, in which case the rhythm is definitely okay to play with.
The one line that to me is very unclear is the first one: "Unloved by either. Hated by both"
Since you said it is based on your novel/story, I probably would understand the first line better if I knew the context, but out of context the line seems like maybe a few words tweaked would help it make more sense? From my understanding of that line, it sounds like you are making a metaphor of heaven and hell - showing that this character is unwanted by both realms/entities. If that is so, then it may or may not match the title "Hellbound", which suggests that this character is definitely wanted by someone. I don't know, I might be reading this poem all wrong, but these are my ideas based on how I interpreted it.
The last three stanzas I interpret as saying that this character is helpless and is being taken advantage of by all the darkest evils of the human psyche. For me, I like to read a poem that sends some sort of message. It seems this poem doesn't really have a moral, unless it is not your intent to have a moral in the poem. If your intent for the poem is to simply be a detailed and metaphorical representation of the main character in your story, then that is a good job. If you want to send a message about something, then I would recommend going back over your poem and deciding how to adapt it so it sends a clear message/lesson. But that's only if you want there to be a message/lesson.
Hope this helps!