Acrostic: I Am the Death of Plants

Yo Aley! I haven't reviewed in quite a while so I'm very rusty with it so uuuuuu here we go. I also promised you this review because of the poetry exchange so uuu yeah

Sorry about being wkward. It has been a very long time lol

The first thing that I always notice whenever people write acrostic poems are that they almost always don't flow well. Either they cut it off very awkwardly or the sentences are choppy and not well-written, since the author is trying to get the words across. Heck, even I've done acrostics and, looking back, I am fairly disappointed with myself with them. Of course, I could revise them with my larger vocabulary that I have recieved as of late, but I don't have the time nor energy to do so.

Ignore my rambling there. I'm just typing and typing and not really paying attention to what I'm putting on the review lmao. Again, it's been quite a little while.

So uuu after saying that, I noticed that you had quite an amazing flow here. This piece is probably one of the most flowing acrostics that I have ever seen. It has vocabulary that makes sense for your age/education level (? I'm not actually sure but I think you went to collage unless I'm thinking of someone else from the WFPs) that was obviously not looked up on the internet, and you didn't chop up sentences like a butcher of words.

Of course, you have some spots, but after maybe saying your poem out loud and pausing after every line, you'll hear what I mean. There's also the one line (Line Three) where you say:

"merge with rotting, covert to dirt."

"Invariably, you crumple brown,

absorb the keening waste,"

Radrook here a once again to offer some suggestions.
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That having been said



Thanks for sharing this poem about a gardener who feels that instead of having a green thumb he has the touch of death because his plants die. The poem transmits the deep frustration that he felt after losing his struggle to make the plant thrive and seeing it die. I like the way the the speaker addresses the plant as if it can actually hear him ad understand his apology and his grief. Actually,there are people who do talk nd sing to their plants because they believe that they thrive on love. Others claim that they communicate with one another. Most people don have such views but te speaker seems to fall maybe into that rare category. The speaker does mention that he might be drowning tye plant. In fact, plants can be harmed by too much water. So he might just be right.That’s why its important to know the requirement of the species which one wishes to thrive.


There is something very quaint about this poem however.
The speaker tells the plant that an inexperienced had nd would have bee better for te plant than his. So that seems to indicate that he knew what he was doing when he killed the plat. The plan can also be employed as a symbol of a person in this poem and how the murderer poisoned or caused a human death..

Looking forward to reading more of your poetry.

Hey

So, I've been procrastinating on reviewing, cause I've had fun putting comments in NaPo threads, but alright, I'll do something finally XD.

I may have had to look up acrostic poems, but I really like how you did this. That's a kinda tongue-in-cheek message, if people don't notice it, but it made me laugh. Hope that's what you were kinda shooting for - at least in having a lighter topic poem.

So, between my family, some of our succulents have died way too quickly, and some plants get all these weird white things that's killing them too, so, I feel your pain.

Your imagery here is spot-on and I love the language you insert in to just add more to the actual situation. In terms of my English Lit class, the connotations of the vocabulary you've picked really brings the tone alive in this poem, since some synonyms such as "turn" instead of "crumple" or "decompose" instead of like "eat," per se.

I have no suggestions for revisions because, honestly, this is really good. I have never seen the death of a plant so fancifully written -- if that's the right word. You sum this up really well but not too abrupt which is something I tend to do. And, I didn't even realize why the poem was split until I read "acrostic," so oh well.

You're a really good poet! (--> and we'll see how April Madness goes tomorrow I guess. yikes.)

Hi Aley,

This is a great poem about the cycle of life and death. It's interesting the role the narrator plays here, the gardener tending to the soil understanding that whatever they yield will inevitably die. I enjoy the first line, brings to mind the image of leaves changing in autumn. I also like the line "these things are bound to happen" referring to the inevitability of nature changing things. I like the way the line "all i can do is water you" kind of runs into "drown you thinking I'm helping" like a stream of thought. There are a lot of great little lines here. The last stanza is kind of a bummer, but I enjoyed the overall poem.

Thank you for sharing

- Dream