John

I really like this. It's short and simple but it still really captures how one can feel in separation of their significant other. I really like the flow of the poem and the free verse scheme. It really goes well with the meaning of the poem. I absolutely love the lines "I've memorized/ the brevity of your name/ in fumbling fingers on skin" It's very poetic and beautiful. I also like the personification of your line "Ghosting sweet flowers." It really gives the flowers a life like reality. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work!

I really like your poem, I think it describes very well, how girls feel when they are away from that "someone special". I mean I know feel that way whenever my boyfriend is gone off somewhere for a week or two. Sorry I got off track there for a sec!

Anywho, I really love how it connects with the reader ( cough cough me) and I look forward to reading more of your poems.

BTW I really think you are a very talented writer!!! Well keep up the good work and maybe I'll review some more of your work!!

I'm not much for poetry, but I like this. John. Very interesting. One of the better poems that I have come across. I like the use of vocabulary, as is perfectly balances your style.

You see, I'm a prose, freestyle, novelistic writer. I don't write poetry. So I don't quite know how it works. I am, however, fairly well educated in the rules and regulations of non-poetic writing. So that's what I'm going off of.

I'm a bit scared to make suggestions here, as I'd hate to ruin something good. But if I were to write this, in your nice little "This sweet stuff of dream fluff of", I would move the last 'of' to the next line. Just a little suggestion to improve flow. But maybe you shouldn't listen to me. Again, I'm not one for poetry.

I shouldn't say anything else. Really liked this. Well done.

Keep on writing.